Beautiful Dreamer

Cherry

By Silver Spun Sand

Fri, 07 Jan 2011
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11 comments
 

If you but looked inside my mind
you would glimpse a wondrous place,
where lovers woo as ring-doves fly
and dragonflies give chase...

where soft winds tease a verdant pond
and butterflies, long tarry,
on yellow kingcups – daffodils,
blue gentian and rosemary.

If you but looked inside my heart
therein would lie such treasure,
more precious than the finest jewels
and wealth no man could measure.

A moth’s kiss now upon those eyes
I place, as you lie sleeping;
oh, maiden, fair – my heart is thine,
say ‘tis I of whom you’re dreaming.

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Submitted by fatboy74 on
A wonderful Misummer Night's Dreamy poem that seems pretty perfect structurally. How long did that last stanza take to get right? :-)

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
A lon.........g time. How did you guess?!! Glad you liked. At least it was worth it;-) Tina

 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Silver-Spun-Sand Wow! perfect the flowing words dragon flies,butterflies all in your head, I to like last stanza and all of poem Is it from Shakespeare. I wouldn't like look inside my head sometimes till calm and rested hah hah! Long time post arrived 5pm. Well deserved cherry! Do you mind me writing under poem to long. julie xx

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Hi, Julie - you enjoyed and I am pleased. I am glad too that you noticed its somewhat Shakespearean style - something I penned just to try and evoke days gone by, and it would seem to have worked;-) It is always good to hear from you and I much enjoy reading your fresh and original thoughts. Speaking of which, have a lovely weekend;-) Tina xx

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Tina, this is such a treasure of a poem, what can I say it was such a pleasure to read. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
And so is your lovely comment, Jenny. Thank you so very much. I have literally spent many years, on and off, with this one and it's good to know it finally paid off. Tina;-)

 

Submitted by Beeme on
This is such a beautiful poem Tina, I really, really enjoyed! Well done on the cherry :) Beeme xx

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Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Thanks, so very much, Beeme;-) Tina xx

 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Silver-Spun-Sand Thankyou comment.I am like a pack of butter,wooden pats have to be shaped and patted back into shape! I can't get right yet. Only mentioned Shakespeare,asRay got large book market cheap on him.I could never understand though! Have a good week-end julie xx

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Hi, Julie. Speaking of Shakespeare, I too was a bit 'at sea' with some of his plays, etc. What helped me was going to see some of them when the opportunity arose. That gave me a whole new understanding and appreciation. Hope your weekend's going well and don't stop 'patting that butter into shape'. You're doing really well. Tina;-)xx

 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Silver-Spun-Sand Hi! Thanks good comment report for me, I could never get my head expression round Shakespeares these those and thighs, etc; we went Stratford On Avon b/b once,very small. The butter pat is it one or two tt, an aunt once her work civil service I think included butter patts rigid lined flat short ribbed is it.? I can't get my poems moulded,let alone once tongue-tied.I read your's so correctly done,all helps me and other's to find time to read.Go on your a flatterer. I get annoyed inside, but try try try. Are you going London Nice day weather up late. julie xx.