Just Killing Time
By Silver Spun Sand
Tue, 23 Aug 2011
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O’er corduroy fields
this huntress flies –
a sparrow-hawk
plots her surprise;
no dove, no rook
escapes her sight.
Suspended then
by unseen thread,
she bides her time
with sole intent.
No bathos is her
swift descent
as thunderbolt
from cyan skies,
a partridge,
more than twice her size,
falls victim
of a cruel demise.
With talons poised –
impales her prey;
no prayers of mine
will change its fate,
nor time diminish
Nature’s ways.
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new Silver-Spun-Sand Hi!
Permalink Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Silver-Spun-Sand
Hi! Tina, another cracker!
of nature's poem. Beautifully written.
The last stanza;
With talons poised-
impales her prey;
no prayers of mine
will chnage its fate,
nor time diminish
Nature's way.
Absolutely true!
julie xx
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I like your rhyme in this
I like your rhyme in this one Tina- for a change- a precise snapshot brilliantly executed (that's no pun!)
Hope the hawk had his fill- I like birds of prey- they seem so proud. Well they are majestic aren't they?
;)Pia
Oh yes got the Byrds in my head- you are clever...
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A sharp and streamlined
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A sharp and streamlined poem, just like the hawk's flight towards its prey.
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this is a piece I can more
Permalink Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
this is a piece I can more than relate too Tina I love
those lines:-
O'er corduroy fields
this huntress flies -
a sparrow-hawk
plots her suprise;
no dove, no rook
escapes her sight.
I love the way you describe the hawk as the
huntress, such a powerful female image, just
beautiful.
Great read, thankyou.
Jenny.
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A very tight, concisely
Permalink Submitted by L G Meadows on
A very tight, concisely worded poem, enjoyed it.
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