Love and War
By Silver Spun Sand
Thu, 11 Nov 2010
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All’s fair in love and war
or so he kids himself –
free-falling, lost in a void...
a vacuum where time
stands still; adrift...somewhere
between compassion
and reasoning.
His rifle, gripped with knuckles
white as the sand on which
cold sweat drips;
a small, brown face meets his,
and an overburdened ass,
bids him throw the rulebook
out the window.
Scrawny heels prepare
to scuff the dust –
too late for some.
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Hello Tina, a very thought
Permalink Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hello Tina,
a very thought provoking poem.
Thankyou for the read.
Jenny. xx
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Very good this Tina,
Very good this Tina, particularly enjoyed penultimate stanza. :-)
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One moment, one little boy,
One moment, one little boy, a multitude of emotions,
yes, thought provoking.
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A he let him get away :D am
A he let him get away :D am I right? It's a lovely vague poem anyway Tina :j I like the second part K xx
"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "
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Ohr well I see the other
Ohr well I see the other side he could have shot his back running away :/ ... I prefer my one :) K xx
"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "
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Very enjoyable poem Tina x:)
Very enjoyable poem Tina x:) As always, so well written & a delight to read x:)
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ohno am missing a lot :/
ohno am missing a lot :/
"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "
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Ohk Ii think it was a small
Ohk Ii think it was a small overburdened ass and he let it go for its little brown face instead of shooting it because ii guess thats what hes meant to do when it gets to tired to carry him? K
"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "
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Very atmospheric, Tina. A
Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Very atmospheric, Tina. A beautifully written and moving poem - and a fitting tribute. Well done!
Magic xxx
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I like this Tina -
Permalink Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on
I like this Tina - especially the last two stanzas
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I can only echo what
I can only echo what everyone else has said. Well done.
:--) xxx
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