In These Shoes?

By Silver Spun Sand

Fri, 04 Jul 2014
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It’s all right for some; bleeding freezing, that’s me! 
You ain’t, are you, Mister, in your posh limousine?
So! You’ve wound down the window; so there is life
on Mars. What I wouldn’t give for one of them cars!
Especially right now; see, my shoes have been nicked.
I hope them who's pinched ’em, they don’t frigging fit!
They got cheap ones in Oxfam, but a bloke threw me out 
and I weren’t doing nothing ‘cept lighting some snout. 
If you don’t mind me saying, them’s posh leather shoes.
Must ’ave cost you a packet; they still look brand new.
 
What’s eating you, mate? Ain’t you never seen feet?
Bit grubby, I’ll grant you, but they scrub up a treat! 
Speaking of which, my beauty sleep beckons.
Think I’ll doss down right here.  What d’ya reckon?
Did you say something, love? No, I don’t do no crack.
Drugs is a mug’s game, so I learned a while back. 
I tell you what, Mister, you’re looking all in...see
the place that you're headed I've already been.
If you paid me a fortune, I’d have to refuse. Lord!
I’d rather walk barefoot... than drive a mile
in your shoes.
 
 
 
Certificate 15
Poem
Silver Spun Sand Poems
Philosophy
Humour

Comments

Submitted by Bee on

Hi Tina.

Love the unexpected ending, and the voice in this is great. The comical style emphasises a serious note along with an edge of sarcasm / irony thrown in with a dash of anger. 

 

Bee

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Thanks, Bee.  That's it, to a 'T'smiley

Tina

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Tina,

great bit of humour in this poem with a serious message.  

Loved also the cockney accent too,  with good rhythm and rhyme.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Thanks, Jenny.  My dad was the one for his 'cockney slang'.  He never said, 'stairs', always 'apples and pears'.smiley

Have a lovely weekend.

Tina

 

Submitted by Denzella on

Hello Tina,

loved this. thought ithad ta Vicotiran feel. sorrry about typing too  early for meds.

moya

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Hi there,Moya.  Thanks so much for picking up on that 'Victorian' feel, it was something I was trying to generate, and I seem to have succeeded.  As for the typing, you could outdo my hubby, anytime, at typing, with, or without meds.  A bad patch at present, but there's always tomorrow to hope forsmiley

Just wanted to say I really do appreciate you taking the time and trouble to read and comment on so much of my stuff.  I know only too well the effort it entails, and I'm truly grateful.

Hope today is a good one.

Tina