Too Cold for Snow

By Silver Spun Sand

Wed, 19 Feb 2014
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Not exactly The Antique’s Road Show...
just a bric-a-brac sale at the village hall. 
 
The weather suited our mood that afternoon;
somehow, you just let it all out.  
 
Tears ran down your face at such a lick,
as if to compete with the monsoon 
dissipating on the car-windows;
 
the stark reality, the here and now of what
the surgeon and the medics said, finally kicking in,
 
which left us no choice but to bide our time
with idle distractions, such as this.
 
The place reeked of hot-dogs and rip-off merchants
but I fancied a Delft, blue and white vase, which
you bought for me;
 
a little chipped on the rim; one of the handles –
missing. Asymmetrical, it’s true, but for me – 
perfect in its imperfections,
 
and I found myself saying I’d treasure it for ever; 
it would always remind me of you, and
 
that day the school found out – and the faces
of the other teachers', and me telling you
it was over.
 
Outside, in the car-park, the rain had turned to sleet.  
You shivered – said how cold it was; 
too cold for snow...
 
On this very bench we sat; close to each other
and alone; the clouds - such strange shapes
and formations - threatening in ways
no weatherman could ever predict
 
and I held you as you shook, and then you lit 
my cigarette for me; something else I’d given up 
giving up.
  
Certificate 15
Poem
Love

Comments

Submitted by Bee on

Hi Tina.

This is filled with echos and vivid flash-back memories in great detail. Reading it feels like looking through a window and understanding the scene. Really moving - lovely writing - heartbreakingly real.

Bee

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Thank you, Beesmiley

Tina

 

Submitted by Denzella on

Hello Tina, here at last,

This is such a  lovely but so sad poem.  It really pulls at the heartstrings.  I see you've not lost your touch.  I'm surprised it didn't attact more comments because it's beautiful.

Moya

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Moya - thank you so much for going back to read this one, and your words mean a lot to me.  Hope today is a good one for you.

Tina