Word Perfect

By Silver Spun Sand

Thu, 20 Nov 2008
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I opened the door –
he was standing there.

He’d come to say
he couldn’t take it any more,
this was goodbye.

Said it was all a waste of time –
we were walking up a blind alley.

Ours had been
the archetypal love story.

Trouble is
love doesn’t have
a beginning or an end.

Only the stories written about it
and this one, no exception.

He’d said, him and me
weren’t going anywhere.

Trouble was …
I thought we’d arrived.

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Comments

Submitted by mikepyro on
I enjoyed it, was simple and not overly detailed, but instead a rather true expression of the conflicts of love.

Give me the beat boys and free my soul! I wanna getta lost in ya rock n' roll and drift away. Drift away...

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Mike - good to hear from you. Glad this piece said something to you. Cheers:-) Tina

 

Submitted by littleditty on
like this one Tina, ditto mikepyro - howsabout a comma? I stumbled a bit.. He'd said, him and me - or - He'd said we Enjoyed :)

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
ld - by Jove, you're right. Comma being put in place right now. Ta muchly. Glad you liked it:-) Tina x

 

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Made me cry. It's strange reading a piece that isn't about you but still feels so autobiographical. This is beautiful Tina. Magic xxx

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
I have to admit, Magic, I was indeed thinking about you when I wrote it. Who has the sixth sense now? I am pleased it meant something to you, but sorry it had to. Tina xxx

 

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
I suspected that it might be, but didn't want to sound egotistical if I'd said something and it wasn't. Thank you for the poem Tina :) Magic xxx

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
You're more than welcome, Magic. An inspiration, that's what you sure are:-) Tina xxx