Father Time

By skinner_jennifer

Wed, 21 Aug 2013
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11 comments
 

Father Time never stops

 

or ponders to ask why?

 

He just drifts on endlessly,

 

never floundering the cogs

 

go on consumed at every turn,

 

 

 

like the hungry feline

 

in silent poise,

 

ready to pounce

 

seconds shift,

 

attack is quick

 

then on to the next.

 

 

One day like a disease,

 

blood will leak

 

from his wounds,

 

spouting jets – though

 

he lay dormant

 

his tears a lament,

 

 

as moments are consumed,

 

so benchmark your existence

 

give notice of this sign,

 

enchant – give light

 

to the bewildered mind,

 

before we run out of time.

 

 

 

Certificate PG
Poem
Opinion

Comments

Submitted by Linda Wigzell Cress on

Hi Jenny.  An interesting form - the spacing leads to a slow pace of reading, placing more emphasis on the economic use of well-chosen language.  A lovely poem to ponder.   

Linda

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Thanks for reading Linda and for your great comment. Just getting my head around this new layout, finding my feet slowly.  Jenny.

 

Submitted by seashore on

Yes I agree - much food for thought here, Jenny.  I really like the cat analogy...

Submitted by Bee on

I've been thinking  about this subject a lot recently, but you have put it so fascinatingly and the image of the feline makes it original. I liked the personality behind it, yet it isn't personal. Like Bear, I've been drawn to read this several times.

Enjoyed.

Bee

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Coral, thank you so much for reading this poem and letting me know your thoughts, it's always nice to hear from you.  Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

What a great comment Bear, I'm so glad you liked the double spacing, I too thought it read better like that. I'm more than happy that you thought it was dream like. Thank you for your kind words and reading.  Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Bee, this is a subject I too have thought a lot about, 'two minds thinking a like!' Glad you liked the feline mention, it seems to stand out to the reader more than any other stanza, so I'm glad it came out right. Always appreciate your thoughts and thank you for reading.  Jenny.

 

Submitted by The royster on

Hi Jenny,   I've got to agree with all the above. I love the cat analogy.  Looking forward to more of your work.  Roy

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Royster, I'm so sorry to get to your comment so late.  What a kind message to leave and I'm glad you enjoyed reading this poem.  Thank you.  Jenny.

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Hi Jenny, I was just browing through your stuff, and realised I had completely missed this one.

I too love the cat anology, and the whole poem as an ethereal feel to it.  So sorry I didn't notice it before, but I'm really glad I've found it now.  It has to be one of my many favourites of yours.

Hope your weekend is a good one;-)

Tina

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Tina,  I'm so pleased you enjoyed reading this poem and you made my day with your comment.  How time does fly.  Appreciate you stopping by to browse through and thank you so much for letting me know.  Hope you're having a good weekend too.  Jenny.