Desire

Cherry

By threeleafshamrock

Tue, 30 Jun 2009

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7 comments

Clothed in good manners;

dressed for the winds of rejection

but ready to disrobe,

should the grey ambiguous atmosphere

be broken by pearly beams,

suggesting stormy heat,

moist sheets

and dam breaking floods

coming

before morning.

Lurve Ramblings

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This is deceptively simple,

Permalink Submitted by whiskey on Tue, 2009-06-30 12:58

This is deceptively simple, and I love it!

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Thanks whiskey, glad you

Permalink Submitted by threeleafshamrock on Tue, 2009-06-30 13:40

Thanks whiskey, glad you liked. Just read your latest story; brilliant! Thanks for reading ;)

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Different from your usual

Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on Tue, 2009-06-30 16:55

Different from your usual style, Chris but this is by no means a bad thing! I like the effect of the separate lines. There is a lot of restraint in this poem which leaves the reader begging for more details ;) Magic xxx

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Thanks Magic, chuffed with

Permalink Submitted by threeleafshamrock on Tue, 2009-06-30 18:47

Thanks Magic, chuffed with another unexpected cherry. I left a gap in the lines so that you could read between them ;) ;) Thanks for reading.

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Ah! really great poem. I

Permalink Submitted by sarah wilson on Tue, 2009-06-30 20:15

Ah! really great poem. I love the idea of reading between the lines. Well deserved cherry:)

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Thanks lovely Sarah,

Permalink Submitted by threeleafshamrock on Tue, 2009-06-30 21:12

Thanks lovely Sarah, appreciate it ;)

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Thanks Nathan ;)

Permalink Submitted by threeleafshamrock on Wed, 2009-07-01 18:16

Thanks Nathan ;)

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