Tomorrows

Cherry

By threeleafshamrock

Sun, 19 Feb 2012
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12 comments
 

The butterflies flit on the breeze,
from bloom to bloom,
like the discarded remnants
of your derided love letter.
My poetry stutters, screamed
onto the page;
jumbled, coarse and meaningless -
no rhyme, rhythm or reason.
Frustration-fizzled stanzas;
vitriolic hailstones,
driven on blizzards
of guilt, remorse and pain.
I don’t want your tomorrows -
they have no future -
I’ve got the ones I need.
Blame me for your hurt,
blame me for everything.
This infatuation’s over...
Go now, go now... please!

Chris Birrane ©2012

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Comments

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Love the alliteration in this one, Chris, and the layout of the poem emphasises its 'punchy' style. 'Frustration-fizzled stanzas'...Brilliant! Tina ;-)xxx

 

Submitted by celticman on
Don't think there is much stuttering here. Sad right enough.

 

Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Thanks Tina for your fizzling, fun-filled comment - glad you liked ;) Chris xxx

Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Th...th...thanks Cman. Sad for sure; most endings are, I find - unless you're talking 'Coronation Street' or 'Eastenders', in which case, definitely cause for unadulterated joy... hehe Chris ;)

Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Oh, thanks for the Cherry folks :)

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
"I don’t want your tomorrows - they have no future - I’ve got the ones I need." - what beautiful phrasing, Chris! Really love this poem, very powerful and to the point. Well done on the cherry! Magic xxx

 

Submitted by twoflowers on
It is terrible when things have to end that way. It takes two to tango, no one person being to blame. There is surely guilt and remorse on the other side. The passion, sadness and pain brings tears to my eyes. You always hope some of it was worth it, that there is a reason and meaning in everything. Wonderful write Chris. :)

Submitted by twoflowers on
It is terrible when things have to end that way. It takes two to tango, no one person being to blame. There is surely guilt and remorse on the other side. The passion, sadness and pain brings tears to my eyes. You always hope some of it was worth it, that there is a reason and meaning in everything. Wonderful write Chris. :)

Submitted by twoflowers on
I apologize for the double comment, it published it twice and I don't know how to remove it being new on here. :)

Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Thanks Magic - hope all is going well with you xxx

Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Thanks Twoflowers. Mistakes are seldom worth the cost; in this case the cost was way too high but 'mea culpa'

Submitted by twoflowers on
You are very welcome Chris, indeed...some lessons are not worth such loss. I believe everyone has a bit of culpa in any given situation. :)