WAR CRIMES
By threeleafshamrock
Sat, 18 Apr 2009
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They called him coward!
He lay with his dying friend and
refusing commands, whispered prayers.
He held the hand until the light
had dimmed from frightened eyes
and bowed to sob and mourn.
They hanged him as the sun
clambered over the horizon.
He stands trembling; confused.
He fancies he sees his fathers face,
coming to him through the cordite
scented mist; yellowed with the morn.
The dampness that falls lightly
on his face, like the dew-soft tears
of a mothers’ broken heart.
Sixteen years but deemed a man;
no more boys’ games or cuddles.
No magic mummy’s hankie!
A rope and lonely bugle call
announcing his departure
from hell; to heaven he falls!
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'A rope and lonely bugle
Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on
'A rope and lonely bugle call
announcing his departure
from hell; to heaven he falls!'
- loved the last stanza Chris, very, very clever! Another haunting yet beautiful read, well done ;) On a side note - I've just ordered 'The Book Thief'!
Magic xxx
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A sad beautiful story....and
A sad beautiful story....and all in the name of encouraging the others.
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Chris, this is just about
Chris, this is just about perfect. I have to agree with Magic too; the last stanza is absolutely brilliant. Congrats on the well-deserved cherry.
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Chris - I think it has all
Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Chris - I think it has all been said. A thought provoking poem, beautifully written. "When will they ever learn?" as the song says.
Well deserving of its cherry. Magnificent. (I bought the 'Book Thief' for my daughter this Christmas, strangely enough.
Tina xxx
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Might just do that! :-)
Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Might just do that!
:-)
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'There is something so
'There is something so emotive about this time in our history.'
It was a real turning point. There is something very touching about all those men marching off to France then going 'over the top' to almost certain death. I don't think the War Office could get away with something like that these days. Perhaps it's just the methods of killing that change.
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Very evocative and deeply
Permalink Submitted by hilary west on
Very evocative and deeply felt. The poetry is in the pity !!!
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Hi Chris I like the sudden
Hi Chris
I like the sudden shock change to "'They hanged him...".
and I especially love
"No magic mummy’s hankie!"
I don't know if that's a common expression where you are from but I hadn't heard it before and it immediately evoked fond memories of my childhood.
As for
"from hell; to heaven he falls!"
Very clever and a great strong and memorable ending.
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Hi Chris. Same experience as
Hi Chris. Same experience as you. That's exactly where it took me back to - oh happy days! Hadn't thought of it for years and a little annoyed you thought up the phrase before me ;D.
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