The Wild Geese I.P.
By threeleafshamrock
Sat, 22 Aug 2009
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The geese are flying south
Across the milky white expanse
As we sway, mouth to mouth
At the end of summer’s dance
The parasols are weaving;
there is a hint of autumn wind.
Winter’s scout is thieving
and the robber won’t rescind
Ah, would our hearts could fly
and chase the summer of our souls;
so, would never kiss goodbye;
pay stoic nature’s tolls.
But summer is more fleeting
than youthful passion’s rites;
with sun-filled days soon meeting
up, with frost encrusted nights.
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A good one Chris. Well done.
Permalink Submitted by luigi_pagano on
A good one Chris. Well done.
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Beautiful. Not sure about
Beautiful. Not sure about 'or pay stoic...'. Seems like one syllable too many. How about 'to stoic nature's tolls.'?
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Ask Ewan. It does seem
Ask Ewan. It does seem better now but I'm not the one to ask about poetry. Maybe I'm too conscious of rhythm.
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Lovely, as late summer
Permalink Submitted by lenchenelf on
Lovely, as late summer honeysuckle :-) atb lenax
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it is a lovely ip isn't it,
Permalink Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on
it is a lovely ip isn't it, and i really like what you wrote too. Congratulations for the cherry! : )
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Nice one : it tinkles like
Permalink Submitted by hilary west on
Nice one : it tinkles like music.
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I can't pick my favourite
Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on
I can't pick my favourite stanza they're all so good! Well done on the cherry with this ;) Much deserved!
Magic xxx
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Rather enjoyed it it's more
Rather enjoyed it it's more a song than a poem &&
(Chose this one for the title I'd hoped it was on the dogs of war. Could be.. )
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