Wipe Out

By threeleafshamrock

Tue, 23 Jun 2009

3 comments

Mangled wreckage,
like mating beetles.
The only creation;
loss!

More young blood;
eighteen!
To old to be young?
To young to die!

A man unto himself,
a boy unto us,
a son unto them,
a statistic unto the rest.

Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on Tue, 2009-06-23 17:40

Short but very effective Chris, I love the fast past created and the repetition works really well in the final stanza! Magic xxx

Permalink Submitted by threeleafshamrock on Tue, 2009-06-23 20:31

Thanks lovely Magic ;) It was for a young man killed in a car crash 2 weeks ago.

Permalink Submitted by threeleafshamrock on Thu, 2009-06-25 18:00

Thanks Nathan ;)