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StoryThe Knee monodemo15 months 1 week ago
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StoryLion Tamer randy-johnson12 years 8 months ago
StoryThe Fairy Who Chases Rainbows mcscraic43 years 9 months ago
Story desert rain Nolan83 years 9 months ago
Story A Sea of Tears and Flame PrimeMorgikk102954 years 5 days ago

My stories

Ribbons

Ribbons are everywhere. Ribbons in a loop support charity, and ribbons fly high for pride of belief Ribbons leaden with gold hang around necks...

Killing Time

I killed time today. It doubled over twice, clockwork heart thudding as it fell from its face As it hit the ground, I thought I heard it squelch. But...

A Sea of Tears and Flame

The blood clouded into the grey water. Like dark tendrils around the coral, entwined snakes spiralled, creating a web of holes. Pitiful moanings...

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This is a really moving piece

Posted on Wed, 19 Jun 2024

This is a really moving piece. However, in my opinion, the rhyme scheme seems a little forced in places, and some of the lines remind me of Yoda-speak. They could possibly do with rewording to help it flow better. But your poem's still great, and...

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The sentence fragments create

Posted on Wed, 24 Feb 2021

The sentence fragments create a powerful sense of hopelessness.

This is great!

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