PrimeMorgikk1029
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Type | Title | Author | Replies | Last updated |
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Story | The Knee | monodemo | 1 | 5 months 1 week ago |
Story | Ribbons | PrimeMorgikk1029 | 0 | 2 years 7 months ago |
Story | Killing Time | PrimeMorgikk1029 | 0 | 2 years 8 months ago |
Story | Lion Tamer | randy-johnson | 1 | 2 years 8 months ago |
Story | The Fairy Who Chases Rainbows | mcscraic | 4 | 3 years 9 months ago |
Story | desert rain | Nolan | 8 | 3 years 9 months ago |
Story | A Sea of Tears and Flame | PrimeMorgikk1029 | 5 | 4 years 5 days ago |
This is a really moving piece
Posted on Wed, 19 Jun 2024
This is a really moving piece. However, in my opinion, the rhyme scheme seems a little forced in places, and some of the lines remind me of Yoda-speak. They could possibly do with rewording to help it flow better. But your poem's still great, and...
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The sentence fragments create
Posted on Wed, 24 Feb 2021
The sentence fragments create a powerful sense of hopelessness.
This is great!
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