I don’t know what’s happened to this week. It’s like a salt and vinegar crisp someone holds under your nose. You turn your head away, you turn back, and it’s gone. Just gone.
Yes, I thought that. As part of a longer piece it'd be fine. I was just thinking, stand alone, the opening is a bit long. Having posted longer work on here it made me really think, does this piece work alone? And that was really helpful. Because...
I think it's great from, 'Darren walked to the stairwell...'. The tone of it is different from there, completely in his head. I think you need a new first line. In my opinion, because it's a short story and everything has to count. Asking for...
It's a character. I see that. And it is how a lot of people talk. But we need to know why he's not let on the tube. 'After the incident with the French horn, the poodle and the can of WD40 Charlie gave me down the pub they wouldn't even let me...
I enjoyed this one two although would have liked a foxy twist in the tale once you've introduced Hargreaves and a buried dog and a loose rung and a threat. Anyway... do you know George Saunders foxy take? ...
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Posted on Sat, 25 Jul 2020
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I enjoyed this episode. It
Posted on Thu, 23 Jul 2020
I enjoyed this episode. It has pace and the dialogue is very good.
Read full commentPosted in Disenchantment 6
Yes, I thought that. As part
Posted on Mon, 13 Jul 2020
Yes, I thought that. As part of a longer piece it'd be fine. I was just thinking, stand alone, the opening is a bit long. Having posted longer work on here it made me really think, does this piece work alone? And that was really helpful. Because...
Read full commentPosted in The Careers Teacher
I think it's great from,
Posted on Mon, 13 Jul 2020
I think it's great from, 'Darren walked to the stairwell...'. The tone of it is different from there, completely in his head. I think you need a new first line. In my opinion, because it's a short story and everything has to count. Asking for...
Read full commentPosted in The Careers Teacher
I love the rain that runs
Posted on Mon, 13 Jul 2020
I love the rain that runs through this and the repeated line.
Read full commentPosted in The Storm Of A Thousand Years
It's a character. I see that.
Posted on Tue, 07 Jul 2020
It's a character. I see that. And it is how a lot of people talk. But we need to know why he's not let on the tube. 'After the incident with the French horn, the poodle and the can of WD40 Charlie gave me down the pub they wouldn't even let me...
Read full commentPosted in Not too Much to Ask
So sorry to hear that x
Posted on Sun, 07 Jun 2020
So sorry to hear that x
Read full commentPosted in Iriecat
Loved both it and the video.
Posted on Sun, 05 Jul 2020
Loved both it and the video. 'apologies of bees' is lovely.
Read full commentPosted in Bee eaters
I enjoyed this one two
Posted on Thu, 02 Jul 2020
I enjoyed this one two although would have liked a foxy twist in the tale once you've introduced Hargreaves and a buried dog and a loose rung and a threat. Anyway... do you know George Saunders foxy take? ...
Read full commentPosted in The Envy of Footprints
Brilliant. Loved it. And what
Posted on Sun, 28 Jun 2020
Brilliant. Loved it. And what a great idea. National Insect Week.
Read full commentPosted in Bluebottle
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