Geoff Smith

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29 of my comments have received 29 Great Feedback votes

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Before I read this poem I

Posted on Mon, 25 Aug 2014

Before I read this poem I just want to say how amazed I am by your prolificness (word?). The only reason I don't read everything you do is that I can't keep up! And even with that, the quality of what you do is so high!

For a tortoise like...

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Posted in It Usually Rains at Funerals

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Great closing couplet

Posted on Wed, 20 Aug 2014

I too, love the closing couplet. You use a lot of very short main clauses. In fact all of the lines except 6 and 13 end with one, and this creates a kind of staccato about the piece as a whole. Was this the intention (it fits pretty well I think...

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Posted in Dirty Lucre

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Phonologically Yours

Posted on Wed, 20 Aug 2014

You've got some great phonology going on here. I love the line:

the stars, are at the bars, seen slow dancing  in the near dusty  air

some heavy sibilance, consonance, alliteration going on there!

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Posted in bastard Ghalza

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You've got a good 'fairy tale

Posted on Sat, 16 Aug 2014

You've got a good 'fairy tale' quality about your writing voice - but this is very messy. You really do need to read this though and tidy it up a bit for the sake of your reader.

You're a real storyteller - so make it count!

Thanks...

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Posted in The Drawer

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Yeah, but if you lot leave,

Posted on Sat, 09 Aug 2014

Yeah, but if you lot leave, we're stuck with them for good! But your're right that Scotland probably will be better off freed from Freidman and Hayek, Thatcher and Cameron. You guys would be able to make a more egalitarian society whilst us lot...

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Posted in Scotland Will Be Free

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I like this very much. Direct

Posted on Sat, 19 Jul 2014

I like this very much. Direct and moving. I liked the ending particulary. There are loads of things I love.

And in the exquisite mirror of you,

for example -  I love the idea of our partners somehow being mirrors that perhaps we...

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Posted in Reflection in you

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would this work?

Posted on Mon, 07 Jul 2014

I really like the poem, but I agree there is something missing too. How do you feel about the idea of putting 'The audience naps.' at the very end, making a two sentence final line?

I think this would create an amusing balance with 'we...

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