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The loom for air
Flash fiction / prose poetry / fairy tale
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I love that fungal image of
Posted on Fri, 11 Apr 2014
I love that fungal image of family. And the way you effortlessly build up a scene, and ambiguity of backstory, in just a few sentences - and the way things like the private detective, Liam's worry, the 'ghosts of the past' all feed into and grow...
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I enjoyed this a lot too -
Posted on Tue, 25 Mar 2014
I enjoyed this a lot too - some fantastic lines, here, and I like the confusion of sentiment - insatiable addiction, half-hearted references to kicking, the emptied wallet and filthy mattress and double-breasted suit jacket.
I think it...
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This is a great piece -
Posted on Wed, 19 Mar 2014
This is a great piece - reflective and stimulating. Some affecting thoughts about belief and the self, and a lot of good advice. Thanks for sharing!
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This is very difficult, but
Posted on Fri, 07 Mar 2014
This is very difficult, but nonetheless extraordinary interior. I like the hint of anorexia that comes in when the narrator hesitates before responding to the “I think your cool”. It deepens things, hints at the relation between a nebulous desire...
Read full commentPosted in Kissing Just For Practice (Part V)
This piece is so raw and spot
Posted on Tue, 11 Mar 2014
This piece is so raw and spot on. Love the little flashes of insight into the narrator's mind, paralleled by the inarticulate conversation and texting - just the perfect mix to encapsulate the age. There's something so engaging about the way you...
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These are my favourite
Posted on Wed, 26 Feb 2014
These are my favourite walking guides to London.
I loved how much of yourself you put into this one. The second paragraph of this is terrific – like the opening to some incredible, as-yet-unwritten (or, I suppose, partially written) novel...
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Hi Michael,
Posted on Wed, 26 Feb 2014
Hi Michael,
Thanks for sharing this story!
I think the problem may have been due to pasting in content directly from Microsoft Word, which has a lot of hidden but inbuilt coding. To do that, you have to click the 'paste from word'...
Read full commentPosted in Adam And Eve (Part 1 of 2)
Really enjoyed the flip of
Posted on Sat, 08 Feb 2014
Really enjoyed the flip of perspectives here, David. The monkey line is a great bridge. And even though the concept is one that's been employed before, you put a new spin on it — I especially loved the hint of Prufrockesque reality that sneaks...
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Loved the imagination in this
Posted on Sun, 16 Feb 2014
Loved the imagination in this piece. The history of an object projected from the mind of youth. Really enjoyed the opener - 'Who could have guessed that a small tree / could be so vicious?' (should there be a question mark?) - it's just such a...
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There's no mistake - this
Posted on Thu, 13 Feb 2014
There's no mistake - this should be our pick of the day - but looks like we've had a server error of some kind (which must have deleted a portion? ) apologies - I'll get it sorted ASAP and we'll have it up over the weekend. This is an incredible...
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