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I have 75 stories published in
3 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 97418 times
and 42 of my stories have been cherry picked.
16 of my 197 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 16 votes
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I have 75 stories published in
3 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 97418 times
and 42 of my stories have been cherry picked.
16 of my 197 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 16 votes
the best piece i've read
Posted on Thu, 07 Jun 2018
the best piece i've read since my partial return to abc. nothing extraneous. always low-key, and just right. you create his reality, which, after all, is what many of us less obtrusively do for ourselves. high regard for this piece, Celticman.
Read full commentPosted in lookers
Parson, okay, some
Posted on Sat, 19 May 2018
Parson, okay, some tightening, to a good effect i think.
The current caught us, pulled us to mid-stream. (cut and)
"we kept our eyes closed, thought of innocent things." (cut and)
"you asked why i couldn't just lie with you...
Read full commentPosted in In the bottom of a boat
big topic. some very nice
Posted on Thu, 03 May 2018
big topic. some very nice images: Easter Island's heads of stone; a feather on an eagle's wing.
not sure the vey general, gently philisophizing tone of the poem works. anytime one wants to say something "big" one probably should start...
Read full commentPosted in What is this life
did you mean "skin on skin"
Posted on Tue, 10 Feb 2015
did you mean "skin on skin"
perhaps cut the last line, your title pretty much has it covered.
"going out somewhere just to come home" is excellent
throughout a fine ear, fine musicality.
perhaps cut "in bed", waking...
Read full commentPosted in These I Have Loved
probably would profit you to
Posted on Mon, 09 Feb 2015
probably would profit you to cut the first 2 lines.
and perhaps cut "hands that once had baked"
i couldn't keep up with the typing for your prolificness.
swep
Posted in Room Six - Tooting Bec Asylum...1982
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