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that's so clever! It reads
Posted on Tue, 12 Feb 2019
that's so clever! It reads like waves coming in, each one higher than the last, or a time lapse film. I love how the last line in each verse links to each next like cogs fitting perfectly, it emphasises how everything works perfectly one stage...
The trouble is that the driving is destroying lush forests. The more people run away the less there is to escape to. The last verse is so hopless, a life that started off aiming at the stars can't reach them and becomes debris which brings down...
Always in awe of those who can make rhyme look so easy, but this poem is about wildlife so it's great for two reasons! And it's as jolly as the flower is. I have read several beautiful dandelion poems on ABC but this is the first with such a...
Enjoyed this so much! I think you must have keen eyes as well as such knowledge, there are layers and layers to what you see that I am unaware of. Waiting at a bus stop here, I saw a buzzard being mobbed by rooks, and often I hear them mewing...
I hope Shirley finds happiness in your book. At the moment she feels like someone searching up and down a corridor looking for a door that has been blocked off and papered over. I am very interested to see how you develop the characters who can...
Oh Jane! I wish I could have read this when I was 12-13. It reminded me so much of how I was. Know now it was OCD. Remember my Mum screaming at methat I should be locked up, the panic attacks when she'd storm in and kick and push things out of...
This is so funny, but also I love how you describe everyone, even a few lines makes me feel I'd know them. It's wonderful writing. Also reminded me of our attempts to get coloured telly, then years later, computer.
you show how to write making a pure image, no unecessary stuff cluttering communication, just a feeling of peace and clarity, as though watching the bird with you as it walks along the shore
I know! He gave my son a long lecture but it went in one ear and out the other. Son is more sensible than me on roads, but still don't think I'd be ok with him having anything except a tank. An electric tank, though
that's so clever! It reads
Posted on Tue, 12 Feb 2019
that's so clever! It reads like waves coming in, each one higher than the last, or a time lapse film. I love how the last line in each verse links to each next like cogs fitting perfectly, it emphasises how everything works perfectly one stage...
Read full commentPosted in Seasons Connect
The trouble is that the
Posted on Sun, 10 Feb 2019
The trouble is that the driving is destroying lush forests. The more people run away the less there is to escape to. The last verse is so hopless, a life that started off aiming at the stars can't reach them and becomes debris which brings down...
Read full commentPosted in Drivers
Always in awe of those who
Posted on Fri, 08 Feb 2019
Always in awe of those who can make rhyme look so easy, but this poem is about wildlife so it's great for two reasons! And it's as jolly as the flower is. I have read several beautiful dandelion poems on ABC but this is the first with such a...
Read full commentPosted in Dandelions
Enjoyed this so much! I think
Posted on Thu, 07 Feb 2019
Enjoyed this so much! I think you must have keen eyes as well as such knowledge, there are layers and layers to what you see that I am unaware of. Waiting at a bus stop here, I saw a buzzard being mobbed by rooks, and often I hear them mewing...
Read full commentPosted in Four Raptors
I hope Shirley finds
Posted on Wed, 06 Feb 2019
I hope Shirley finds happiness in your book. At the moment she feels like someone searching up and down a corridor looking for a door that has been blocked off and papered over. I am very interested to see how you develop the characters who can...
Read full commentPosted in An Outing: Part Two
"out of decay and wilting
Posted on Mon, 04 Feb 2019
"out of decay and wilting drabness, dearth" what a description of Winter!
"Surprising growth" is clever as they rise out of the ground
"bright white droplets gleam" is perfect, droplets as they are so small....
Read full commentPosted in Snowdrops
Oh Jane! I wish I could have
Posted on Mon, 04 Feb 2019
Oh Jane! I wish I could have read this when I was 12-13. It reminded me so much of how I was. Know now it was OCD. Remember my Mum screaming at methat I should be locked up, the panic attacks when she'd storm in and kick and push things out of...
Read full commentPosted in Bedtime Rituals
This is so funny, but also I
Posted on Mon, 04 Feb 2019
This is so funny, but also I love how you describe everyone, even a few lines makes me feel I'd know them. It's wonderful writing. Also reminded me of our attempts to get coloured telly, then years later, computer.
Read full commentPosted in Even the IRA couldn't get us a telephone.
you show how to write making
Posted on Sat, 02 Feb 2019
you show how to write making a pure image, no unecessary stuff cluttering communication, just a feeling of peace and clarity, as though watching the bird with you as it walks along the shore
Read full commentPosted in Avocet
I know! He gave my son a long
Posted on Tue, 29 Jan 2019
I know! He gave my son a long lecture but it went in one ear and out the other. Son is more sensible than me on roads, but still don't think I'd be ok with him having anything except a tank. An electric tank, though
Read full commentPosted in Brooksy
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