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Hits all five senses at once
Posted on Wed, 31 Aug 2016
Hits all five senses at once - this is a real prize of a poem, and our Facebook and Twitter Pick of the Day!
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Read full commentPosted in The Grief of Gaziantep.
I especially like the way you
Posted on Fri, 12 Aug 2016
I especially like the way you insert the really big stuff (the father's voyeurism and abuse) into the more inconsquential storyline. I'm not sure if you're looking for feedback, but if you are I'd suggest perhaps losing or shortening some of the...
Read full commentPosted in Des Moines, 1979
I'm so sorry you still aren't
Posted on Sun, 07 Aug 2016
I'm so sorry you still aren't getting email notifications Alphadog. Lluis the techie is working on it. Is there any other possible reason why they mightn't work for you? Could you check the email address on your account is still current? Have you...
Read full commentPosted in The Cobbe House v a hidden revelation and a decision
This is very well written - I
Posted on Thu, 04 Aug 2016
This is very well written - I'm enjoying it!
Read full commentPosted in Ned (2)
I had to read back at one
Posted on Thu, 21 Jul 2016
I had to read back at one point to work out how many people there were and who was who, but apart from that this is great. The dialogue feels very authentic - really nice to see some prose from you!
One typo - discrete should be discreet
Read full commentPosted in Dogs
looking forward to finding
Posted on Tue, 12 Jul 2016
looking forward to finding out more - Welcome to ABCTales!
Read full commentPosted in Memoirs of a Wanna Be: Intro and Chapter 1
A very original idea and
Posted on Thu, 07 Jul 2016
A very original idea and elevated by the wealth of period detail. Brilliant!
Read full commentPosted in Flowers (Part Two of Two) (IP)
Hi Deerman, welcome to
Posted on Mon, 04 Jul 2016
Hi Deerman, welcome to ABCTales from me too! Just re-title this as part one, and then post the remaining text as part two. Hope that helps!
Read full commentPosted in The Spectator, chapters 1-3
Very nicely done. Fantasy is
Posted on Mon, 27 Jun 2016
Very nicely done. Fantasy is not my thing but you kept my attention. A good balance of description and action.
A couple of suggestions for you:
Feeling the warmth of his hands she smiled and opened her eyes and looked into his. Her...
Read full commentPosted in Goodbye
so strange and touching how a
Posted on Sat, 04 Jun 2016
so strange and touching how a few words can take on such a special significance. Perhaps it's because of the care she's showing for you in saying them?
Read full commentPosted in Drive carefully
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