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I have 17 stories published in one collection on the site.
My stories have been read 446994 times and 170 of my stories have been cherry picked.
2103 of my 14,340 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 2152 votes

2103 of my comments have received 2152 Great Feedback votes

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I enjoyed this very much -

Posted on Sat, 27 Sep 2014

I enjoyed this very much - you have created a strong narrative voice. A couple of suggestions: you could possibly quicken the pace a little, also the ending is a bit weak and finally in the second paragraph I think you need to switch high and low...

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Posted in THE ISLAND

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I really like this too - you

Posted on Sat, 13 Sep 2014

I really like this too - you've really brought the characters to life - hopefully not so much as they'd notice!

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Posted in I have no sympathy

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Another compelling piece -

Posted on Mon, 08 Sep 2014

Another compelling piece - again I think you could have done a bit more with the ending. Do keep going.

Although this is rated 18, which is fine, the title appears on the home page so must be a U rating. It needs to be either changed, or...

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Posted in F**k Tuesdays

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Thoroughly agree with the

Posted on Fri, 05 Sep 2014

Thoroughly agree with the above. A fascinating picture of both modern America, and mental health. I don't know if you plan to develop this further, but if you do, perhaps take it a bit slower, try not to jump from one thing to another

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Posted in The Science of Fiction

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this kept me glued to the

Posted on Wed, 27 Aug 2014

this kept me glued to the screen - what a fantastic piece of writing!

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Posted in Spit Out the Bugs in Your Mouth

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I think the sparrows theme

Posted on Wed, 13 Aug 2014

I think the sparrows theme works beautifully - a very good piece of writing

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Posted in Sparrows

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I love this poem, but please

Posted on Tue, 01 Jul 2014

I love this poem, but please tell me what a gont is - I have no idea and neither does google!

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Posted in The Gonts

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right, you have a fantastic

Posted on Mon, 30 Jun 2014

right, you have a fantastic ending with this Denzella, and your plot is really developing nicely. Again, you need to work a bit on the dialogue (sorry to go on about it!). Too much with nothing to break it up makes it lose authenticity

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Posted in The Labour Planet - A Working Title - Part Ten - 1177 Words - Updated

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