Insertponceyfrenchnamehere
Primary tabs
I have 17 stories published in
one collection on the site.
My stories have been read 461568 times
and 170 of my stories have been cherry picked.
2214 of my 14,658 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 2262 votes
couple of typos in this:
Posted on Fri, 25 Mar 2016
couple of typos in this:
look pass the bed
look pass the person
and also I'm not sure about a la chacun - shouldn't it be chacun a ses besoins etc?
Read full commentPosted in Caffeine Supernova, #1
Typo: it's Jackson Pollock
Posted on Sat, 19 Mar 2016
Typo: it's Jackson Pollock
also I think Warhol used soup cans, not beans
Interesting piece - thank you!
Read full commentPosted in Today's Art Scene
I will be looking forward to
Posted on Sat, 12 Mar 2016
I will be looking forward to part two as well. You've done a good job with introducing different aspects of what looks to be an interesting plotline.
About the tenses: the best thing would be to find someone to read it through - or read it...
Read full commentPosted in Searching for Change ch.1
A lovely positive message!
Posted on Sun, 21 Feb 2016
A lovely positive message!
Read full commentPosted in But Honestly
Brilliant story! (I feel a
Posted on Fri, 19 Feb 2016
Brilliant story! (I feel a bit sick now though)
Read full commentPosted in The Everlasting Pie
A very honest piece. A sense
Posted on Wed, 17 Feb 2016
A very honest piece. A sense of disassociation from the world, lonliness and frustration.
If you'd like feedback I'd suggest you lose the introductory piece in capitals. Perhaps add it at the end (but not in caps - that looks quite shouty...
Read full commentPosted in I awoke today. A Physical Sense Gone, How Did I Get Here?
Awful how words can destory
Posted on Wed, 17 Feb 2016
Awful how words can destory someone isn't it. If it's fiction, it's very convincing
Read full commentPosted in BEST DAYS OF YOUR LIFE?
Hello Tom - there's a real
Posted on Mon, 15 Feb 2016
Hello Tom - there's a real wealth of detail in this piece. For feedback I would suggest that you simplify your language a little. Did you use a thesaurus? Some of the words you've chosen don't have the meaning I think you wanted
Welcome to...
Read full commentPosted in The effluvium by the sea.
now I'm enjoying this! I like
Posted on Thu, 11 Feb 2016
now I'm enjoying this! I like the ambiguity of the relationship between the two men - the way it seems to have more depth than in the previous parts. I think there's more balance in this part too, between action and backstory, although I...
Read full commentPosted in The Net Caster (Part Three)
hahah - Bee they are
Posted on Mon, 08 Feb 2016
hahah - Bee they are brilliant! I think I've come across photos of them while searching for pictures for your Journey series. I do hope you're going to write the knitter a thank you poem and direct her to ABCTales to read it? (and the rest of...
Read full commentPosted in Knitted Knockers
Pages