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I have 123 stories published in 8 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 365644 times and 167 of my stories have been cherry picked.
131 of my 1,380 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 133 votes

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Surasawa Pond

By Surasawa pond on a billboard a holy man paints a lie: ‘On the third day of the third month the dragon of this pond will ascend to heaven.’ Two men...
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Calloused to Birdsong

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Draw a line. Scrape it through trees. Dissect mountains, valleys, lakes. Forget the sun, gaudy bauble, wasting rays whoring light and fix your border...

RIP OED

Help! Help me! I’m being attacked. Intimidated. Violated. Invaded. The words. They’ve ganged up on me. They've crowded my eyes, cut off my exits,...
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Indelible

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I can see your scars. They're in the way you talk, how you pull your sleeves down. How you slump. I can see your scars. They're in your stare. From...

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131 of my comments have received 133 Great Feedback votes

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That gear change at the end

Posted on Mon, 19 Mar 2018

That gear change at the end of the first verse...can hear it resound. Stunning imagery.

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Posted in Shifting Sands

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FUCK yes.

Posted on Wed, 21 Feb 2018

FUCK yes.

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Posted in coldest planet

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I love the cadence. To drop

Posted on Sat, 09 Dec 2017

I love the cadence. To drop the lines as you've done and maintain the mood is a skill. Agree with PhillipS the last line makes it.

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Posted in True nature

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I like this already. It's

Posted on Sat, 17 Dec 2016

I like this already. It's intriguing and snappy, has a first scene of a film feeling to it - breezy. It's not easy to write about football authentically so I'll be interested to see how you carry on with this. Keep posting and welcome to the site...

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Posted in The Loanee - Page 1

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I found the insertion of

Posted on Fri, 16 Dec 2016

I found the insertion of images jarring at first but when I got used to them it gave a powerful effect akin to 'We didn't start the fire.'

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Posted in subjected/ subjugated

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Absorbed by this. Put me in

Posted on Mon, 25 Jul 2016

Absorbed by this. Put me in mind of the opening chapter of 'The Curious Incident...' not just with the plot but also with the (very different) twist on the everyday your protagonist has. Is this the start of something?

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Posted in Witnesses

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Great voice. Clipped prose.

Posted on Tue, 12 Jul 2016

Great voice. Clipped prose. Dances along nicely. Would love to read more. Welcome!

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Posted in Memoirs of a Wanna Be: Intro and Chapter 1

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Great re-write. Much more

Posted on Thu, 07 Jul 2016

Great re-write. Much more focused and evocative.

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Posted in Her

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Reminded me of Plath in some

Posted on Mon, 11 Jul 2016

Reminded me of Plath in some lines. Great writing.

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Posted in Addicts

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This is gorgeous - the rose

Posted on Fri, 08 Jul 2016

This is gorgeous - the rose lines in particular. Can I make a suggestion to steer away from some cliches like 'lit up every room'? The rest of your lines are so well crafted you could go for something more obscure.

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Posted in Beautiful

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