That brighteyes poem is quite something else. Great, guttural writing. I personally would have preferred some well-timed line breaks to organise the stream-of-consciousness thoughts -- if for nothing else, readability -- but it approximated the stress of socially enforced shopping quite beautifully. And it seems to have been written in this rushed, f_ck grammar manner which I find very refreshing.
Just very good.
Lord, I do love Ted Berrigan. Spot of Gertrude Stein too.
Re: line breaks, as Sean suggests. I posted the same poem on UKA and the most-suggested move was to add line breaks if I wasn't going to go for punctuation, to aid the reading. I did put a version with breaks up there, but it's hard to tell if the momentum's retained, or whether in fact it actually helps with momentum building. Still undecided as to which version is better, so any suggestions appreciated.
And you have J to thank for the title.
Cheers folks! Glad you liked, and thanks again for POTW tony!
K x
"I have a room for life at the Home for the Chronically Groovy."
Give me the beat boys and free my soul! I wanna getta lost in ya rock n' roll and drift away. Drift away...
"I have a room for life at the Home for the Chronically Groovy."
"I have a room for life at the Home for the Chronically Groovy."