Dream

Really liked this, great concept. I loved the lines: 'The water made the sound: cliché, cliché, cliché' and the way that this idea is inverted at the end of the poem, when it is revealed that the empty waves, upon closer inspection, are seen to carry with them 'a huge flock of addendum'. A sophisticated exploration of the tension between appropriation of clichéd subject matter and the poetic validity and force of such subject matter, perhaps also suggesting the redundancy of language when confronted with something as monumental and done to death as nature, the sea etc. Anyway, I think I'm starting to get into pretentious critic mode here so I'll make myself scarce, great poem though, enjoyed it a lot. thanks!

Crikey Joe, this is bloody brilliant. Ax

excellent really enjoyed the idea ad the way the poem unfolded. Enjoyed Capoeiragems critique too.

Brilliant. T.S. Eliot, in particular I feel, would've loved this, but I have a fear that, pedant as he could be sometimes, and after he'd slapped on the after-sun, he might've questioned whether in fact they weren't 'a huge flock of addenda', but, personally, I'd've told him not to worry, of course.