Vignette
By sunshine
Wed, 18 Jun 2008
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In the beginning
we laughed because your bed was too small,
and we clung to each other all night
to prevent ourselves from falling.
In the beginning
I would stay awake to sketch you as you slept,
studying the beauty of your hands
lying open on the sheets
Now we sleep without touching
And your hands are formed into fists
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Short, sharp and very
Short, sharp and very powerful. I particularly like the abridged third stanza. It doesn't need to say anymore.
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Yes, this is so powerful,
Yes, this is so powerful, esp, I'd agree, the last stanza. And the first...gosh, yes, especially when you don't have a wall in the right place...
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This is truly wonderful and
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This is truly wonderful and the way in which you write pins down every emotion artistically and powerfully,
I admire your work sunshine,you have a gift.Lynne.x
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