December Days
By Lem
Tue, 20 Jan 2009
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Lying beneath the bare-branched willow
Gaze up at the grey sky. You heard me
Once in a dream; a whisper, in silver
But you never heard the rain.
Feel the ice tide deep inside
Melt- slow black and seductive
Spinning dreams, dim memories
Of dull December days, spent with you
Soft singing by the river, kissing in the rain
White fingers pressed to scarlet lips
Say once, try twice, for love in apathy
Perpetual motion; I dream as I decay.
December days.
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Oh, this is amazing. The
Permalink Submitted by Double-dreamer on
Oh, this is amazing.
The imagery in this poem is astounding, I love the 'white fingers pressed to scarlet lips' and 'i dream as i decay'.
I'm new to this site and if all of the poetry here is of this quality I think I might bow out gracefully.
Again, well done.
Double-dreamer
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This is beautiful, lovely
This is beautiful, lovely imagery, such as:
'You heard me
Once in a dream; a whisper, in silver'
However, I think you need to reconsider your punctuation, which is somewhat sporadic in nature...!
J x
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This captures the essence of
Permalink Submitted by tamara on
This captures the essence of love,it is wonderful.
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Oh Lem! I love this one! Its
Permalink Submitted by HeatherFeather on
Oh Lem! I love this one! Its awsome! Especially:
'You heard me once in a dream; a whisper, in Silver'
I was there when you wrote it!
HeatherFeather xx
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