A Cup of Tea

Cherry

By _elle_

Sat, 24 Jan 2009
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9 comments
 

Scald my lips so that their nerves become undone,
Anything to make the act of kissing you less
sickening.
I drink the tea that burns my lips, but only feel
The press of you more on my skin.

They say a cup of tea will make it better
But what if we don't like the taste of tea?
What happens when it doesn’t work on me?
When nothing can numb the hate you make me feel
What works better than a soothing cup of tea?

I hate the curve of your lips, the fact that your
lungs are still intact.
Soothe the boiling blood, by pretending that they’re his,
And not yours. I wish you knew I was doing so.

His words make it worth carrying out:
A promise of a reason to stop, an excuse valid that
no-one will force his arms around me.
You were forewarned and when you are lost
Remember the tragedy I promised.

Certificate PG
Poem
Guys
Romance

Comments

Submitted by tamara on
This is a very interesting poem _lynze_ I enjoyed reading it and it holds underlying secrets to it I feel. Well done.

Submitted by _elle_ on
Thank you :)

 

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
This is brilliant _lynze_ I like the erotic edge to it with the description of his lips. There's a sadness to it yet I believe there is strength and determination as well! Magic xxx

 

Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
WOW! There is some depth of feeling in this; you are really letting go here. Like this one. Well done! Just one point - should the first word be 'Scald'? Just wondering not criticising. Chris X

Submitted by _elle_ on
Yes, you're right, but i think they're pronounced the same. I shall change that now then. Lynze x

 

Submitted by tamara on
Well done _lynze_ on the cherry!A ripe piece of writing!x

Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Congrats on the cherry, well deserved. Chris X

Submitted by jennifer on
A superb poem, I especially loved the powerful opening: 'Scald my lips so that their nerves become undone, Anything to make the act of kissing you less sickening.' Gosh, how delightfully bitter! However, I felt the second stanza was slightly repetitive, especially among the quality of the other three. J x

 

Submitted by _elle_ on
Thanks :) Yeah, i know, i'm not so fond on that stanza myself, but i was just trying to convey 1) the stupidness that a cup of tea makes things better 2) how the narrative voice was (underneath the bitterness) quite worried, but yeah, i get what you mean lol Lynze x