After Dinner Mint

By lenchenelf

Thu, 29 Jan 2009

7 comments

Minutes seemed like hours
When we were on a date,
We’d settle down to dinner
You’d push it round the plate.

Conversations, stilted,
Silences grew long,
Inspiration wilted
Like a jaded song.

If love is worth the striving for
In all we say and do,
Why did it feel like tooth extraction
When I tried loving you?

Permalink Submitted by Yutka on Thu, 2009-01-29 18:24

not a bad "doodle", the feeling is raw and I like the rhyme, sadly now rather out of fashion... Yutka:)

Permalink Submitted by lenchenelf on Thu, 2009-01-29 19:36

Thanks Yutka, it was scribed after ovehearing my daughters comparing notes, post date, in their late teens....such simple honesty :-) atb L :-)

Permalink Submitted by tamara on Thu, 2009-01-29 19:39

It is brilliant,really enjoyed reading it.

Permalink Submitted by lenchenelf on Thu, 2009-01-29 19:42

Thank you Tamara :-)

Permalink Submitted by threeleafshamrock on Fri, 2009-01-30 01:37

Len, I think we have a similar sense of humour. Love it ;) Chris

Permalink Submitted by lenchenelf on Fri, 2009-01-30 09:03

Thanks Nathan & Chris, glad it brought a smile :-) L

Permalink Submitted by jennifer on Sat, 2009-01-31 22:17

Ouch! J x