The test

By pumadelta

Tue, 09 Jun 2009
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Concentrate your mind
Point your thoughts to higher things
Pure like volcanic mountain springs
Sieved through years of sedimentary rock

Stand firm, steady your course
Through assailing winds
And prevailing forces hold
Your course, this too will pass

Trust your character
You’ve been tested before
More intensely but different

This time you have the advantage
Experience is on your side
And now you possess
A steel focused mind

And when the storm has passed
And the waves subside
You will see this as just
Another page to be archived

And stored for future tests in life

Certificate U
Poem
Theres things we need to talk about...
Autobiography

Comments

Submitted by jennifer on
In the first stanza, I think you mean 'through', second stanza, 'too', fifth stanza, 'storms' is short for 'storm has' so should have an apostrophe - 'storm's', unless you mean storms plural, in which case it should be 'pass'. But aside from all that, some really lovely imagery going on here! J x

 

Submitted by pumadelta on
Thanks for the gramma lesson Jennifer, i will go about correcting asap...glad you liked the piece just of the top of my head really but alot of the imagery was inspired by some of the old bible poetry...ive been trying to steer my way from that recently...excuse the pun...but they do say you always go back to basics...anyway im gonna correct things then have a look at some of your work.