Watch

By Firebird

Fri, 30 Oct 2009

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5 comments

I watch you
Open your heart
I hold you
In suspense
We part
And lines draw across a blank page
I call to you
Open your soul
Feel me
Fall
Watch me
Rewind
Recoil and spoil
A future drained
of need and greed and lover's lament
Watch me
Crawl
Before you
I stand
A shadow
Split by fire
Soulful spirit of desire
Watch me
For I know not what I do
I once was whole in my solitude
But broken now
I watch for you.

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A quite sad, however a very

Permalink Submitted by Beeme on Fri, 2009-10-30 18:22

A quite sad, however a very beautiful poem. I really enjoyed. Loved these lines; 'A shadow Split by fire Soulful spirit of desire' Beeme xx

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I agree, its so sweet. As i

Permalink Submitted by Yazmin on Sat, 2009-10-31 11:51

I agree, its so sweet. As i finished reading it I said "AWW" Ha. Good Job Yaz

Yaz

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Thanks :)

Permalink Submitted by Firebird on Sun, 2009-11-01 13:25

Thanks :)

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'We part And lines draw

Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on Sun, 2009-11-01 13:40

'We part And lines draw across a blank page' - really love these lines and really interesting structure! Magic xxx

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Thank you Magic:) Really

Permalink Submitted by Firebird on Sun, 2009-11-01 15:11

Thank you Magic:) Really appreciate your feedback. x

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