Watching Emily Play...(I.P.)

By Silver Spun Sand
Mon, 20 Sep 2010
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28 comments
Spring birdsong
called the tune
as she danced
amongst the bluebells
in the starry, maple shade
down her usual path
to the fire-pond in the glade
where she fished
for tadpoles
and sticklebacks –
fishing-net in hand
and met a man
in khaki shorts –
a nature-buff like her,
with a love for creatures
great and small;
and quite by chance,
was a spider on her dress.
If she kept stock still –
he’d brush it clean away...
or so he told her
as, breathless, she ran...
One afternoon in May
when he taught her things
she hadn’t yet learned
how to say.
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Hi Tina, This is such a
Permalink Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Tina,
This is such a beautiful poem, it's so much like a
fairy tale, my favourite, and so well written.
You really bring the magic to ABC Tales lovely.
Jenny.
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Agree with Jenny - has that
Agree with Jenny - has that Angela Carter fairytale with a twist feeling - and beautifully told. Fab Tina :-)
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So soft and well , mellow. A
So soft and well , mellow. A happy poem. Thanks.
pia ;)
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this one's very good Tina,
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this one's very good Tina, well done
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I really liked this one,
Permalink Submitted by maggyvaneijk on
I really liked this one, there's a twist at the end that leaves an after taste, maybe it wasn't all as care-free and innocent as it initially seems.
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I agree with all of the
Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on
I agree with all of the above comments, Tina. This is a very clever tale of an innocence lost - and one beautiful, if darkly, told. Well done on the cherry!
Magic xxx
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Tina, Just wanted to come
Permalink Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Tina,
Just wanted to come back and say, a well deserved
cherry, or should I say cherries. Congratulations.
Jenny.
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Oh I see Tina- know exactly
Oh I see Tina- know exactly what you were talking about- just didn't want to see it. I guess you know why! I know who that little girl was !
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A case of her losing her
Permalink Submitted by luigi_pagano on
A case of her losing her cherry and you gaining one, dear Tina?
Luigi xxx
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Poor little Emily - so
Poor little Emily - so sad-really does tear a life apart
pia xxx
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A very good one, all the
A very good one, all the better for not being obvious with its message. Any relevance to the Pink Floyd song or is that just coincidence?
Rob
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Yes I think you're right.
Yes I think you're right. That uneasy mixture of childhood and darkness was something Syd Barrett did very well (as did Peter Gabriel in his early days). Good choice.
Rob
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I know the song too!
I know the song too! Wondered if there was a dark shadow over the ending, K
"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "
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not just me then...
not just me then...
"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "
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What I love about this poem
What I love about this poem is that if taken purely at face value (i.e not knowing how old Emily is or how old the person she meets is) it could be purely innocent and yet on the other hand it can be read as something totally evil and sinister.
Beautiful all the same.
:--) xxx
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