Woman
By Silver Spun Sand
Fri, 29 Oct 2010
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18 comments
On tacky, lino floor
huddled in a corner;
legs drawn up
to retain a last shred
of dignity ... hair
draped across her brow,
cascades, ever downwards,
the colour of smoke...
wet – from the shower
she didn’t want to take;
terrified of water
as she’s grown,
it drips like tears
from pendulous breasts.
Hands that, so many times,
stroked my fevered cheek
cupped over her eyes ...
scared of what I’d say
if I could see them
and notice how they’d glow
as amber fires – beacons
to light her passage home.
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Very moving, and disturbing.
Permalink Submitted by Margharita on
Very moving, and disturbing. The imagery of 'like tears from pendulous breasts' is particularly effective, and the 'amber fires' really caught me. I'm not sure 'enjoy' is the right word for my reaction, but I'm very glad I read it.
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Hi Tina, this is such a
Permalink Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Tina,
this is such a descriptive piece, very imaginative.
But also if I read it right quite sad.
Again you have surpassed yourself.
Jenny.
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A brave poem that pulls no
A brave poem that pulls no punches, the pain is layered with such tenderness. very moving.
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a bit of a shocking scene.
a bit of a shocking scene. You describe it very well- simply amplified.
;)Pia
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What an intense and moving
Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on
What an intense and moving piece, Tina! I especially love the images in the final stanza. Such a difficult subject to write about - but you've tackled it brilliantly and bravely!
Magic xxx
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Find this quite hard to read
Find this quite hard to read Tina, but like with watching emily play you have conveyed it so well and so movingly it is hard not to come back to. Seems wrong to say but a poem of great beauty. :-):-(
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stark and tender scene,
Permalink Submitted by littleditty on
stark and tender scene, captured, and very moving Tina xxx
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Incredibly powerful,
Incredibly powerful, incredibly well written.
:--)
P.S. kisses after my squiggle seemed frivolus and innapropriate so I left them off - how does one intimate a hug instead?
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