CRY CRY BABY (IP)

By Cavalcader

Wed, 29 Dec 2010
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6 comments
 

When I was very small
I wanted always to fly

So our old home with rickety
two flights of stairs
instead of going to the bedroom
so dark nobody in

I stood on the landing
in my pink pyjamas
on tip-toes
which made me feel so tall

Leant over the bannister rail
really a bit of a fool
over the top I went
flying through the air

Seeing stars
landed on the 2nd flight
down down down

I sat and cried and cried
the door knocker banging outside
a voice calling through the letter box
"come and open the front door"

Before mum turned the key in the lock
I managed to get to the front door
badly bruised
shaken up for sure

Cuddles checked over
many sobs
to crown it all
Dad's mynah bird

saying
"Where's dad
along the pub

I'll never want to fly
to this day

And yet I love looking
at the big golden moon
and sparkling stars

The planes hovering
with like fairy lights on
and the white puffy clouds

all comments please!
and help!
Made up,5 minutes
You can tell.True.

Certificate U
Story
Autobiography

Comments

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Julie - this is lovely. A charming childhood memory and so apt for the I.P. One small thing...at the beginning of the 3rd verse up from the bottom I think you mean:- And yet I love looking at the big golden moon and sparkling stars I like, very much, the way you describe planes as being lit up by 'fairy lights'. Indeed, that is just what they look like at night. Well done! Tina x

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on
I really like this one Julie - it looks like you spent much longer than five minutes. One thing: the third stanza up from the bottom - unyet - I think you might mean "and yet" hope you had a lovely Christmas

 

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
A belated Merry Christmas, Julie! This is wonderful -some beautiful descriptions you've got here. Magic xxx

 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Silver-Spun-Sand Thankyou so much for correction, I have done now to and yet, my diction. Sounds better now. Part I put in way back of fall. The rest I made up the brain is thinking bit now, so much going on. I do like the last stanzas thanks.Rays wants computer I have to be quick? Jotted bit down, thinking Friday to-morrow not. julie xx

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Insertponceyfre Thanks pointing out correction too, and Silver-Spun-Sand has now corrected,sounds better. Do I put in ' over words. 'Fairy lights' 'and yet' Thanks comment and help. Not my computer have to be quick. Perfect happy christmas ever,all went well daughters and son in law,food,when to talk when to praise,three cats so happy with a stuffed mouse, but had herbs in.Great couple,wines,whoops. Lift there and back 10pm heavy roof iced car.No job yet! Decoration fab:new tree. We have previous twinkle lights,go on and off,and blinking xmas card lovely push bell on it,don't know tune. all the best julie xx

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Mistaken-magic Hi! Thankyou lovely comment, I tried bit way back. So done again, differently, I like the last stanzas. Yes,thankyou the best happy christmas ever had with the daughter and son in law. Still not straight,central heating, bathroom bath still full up. Warm Ray has cough catching. I do hope your well,and enjoyed your christmas, I was looking picture Durham other day,thinking you deep snow. I have been off here while, all what was going on here,hectic time! over.Daughter's dinner superb,wine,whoops! and banana wine,then box? game ugh1 tired out we were. Her decorations fab;new tree and sloped bunches holly or green leaves,laying inside, stuffed birds like doves.Beautiful,an sky blue dragon flies hanging down,further on.Three cats play with and little sof stuffed mouse,they were so happy. The car they have iced roof over by 10pm. home.Beautiful presents ott. A happy new year to you. I only put few things down on poem story, five minutes. Thanks help. julie xx How is Durham. Have get off if he needs his computer. Take care? Like yours, and all.