A RENAISSANCE TALE

By skinner_jennifer

Tue, 14 Jun 2011
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17 comments
 

The heavy velvet tapestry
hung on the wall of the
Maiden's bedchamber,

she brushes her waist length hair
while admiring her reflection...
her bosom lifted high,

anticipating her lady in waiting,
there is a knock at the door -
"enter!" the Maiden quietly whispers,

"my lady... may I dress you?"
she enquires of the Maiden fair,
her Gown hung like an Angel in mid air,

luminating, captivating...
each encrusted jewel radiant,
sparkling in the bright candle light,

the Red Velvet gown
this Maiden took down...
was opulent and grand,

ready and prepared
she leaves her bedchamber
moving down the passageway,

descending the staircase
simply gliding
as she sweeps along,

entering the magnificent splendour
of the King's Court - appropriate
for a Princess,

all eyes turn and focus
on this Maiden fair...
she would be the Belle of the Ball,

her Prince captivated - intoxicated
by her beauty...for she is the
King's Daughter and soon to be Wed.

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Comments

Submitted by Highhat on
This fine poem brought a very vivid picture to my mind. So well described Jenny ;)Pia

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Pia, thankyou again for your great comment, you know I always appreciate what you have to say. Hope you're enjoying your week so far. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
You really did evoke 'times past' with this delightful poem. A couple of minor points. You need an apostrophe in 'maiden's chamber' in the first stanza, and one in the third from last, i.e. 'king's court'. Also, should be 'radiant' in the fifth. I like, very much, the way you describe her gown as hanging down 'like an angel in mid-air'. You have a wonderfully vivid imagination, Jenny, and you paint, for the reader, an equally vivid picture with your words;-) Tina

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Tina, again thankyou for helping me, I really thought I'd checked and double checked everything, Oh well! It's very kind of you to read and give me help, I'm really glad you enjoyed this poem. Hope you have a great rest of the week. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on
I agree with Tina - you've managed to create the atmosphere very well

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hello insert, thankyou so much for your kind words, I'm glad you liked it and thankyou for letting me know. Jenny.

 

Submitted by SteveM on
Hi Jenny, Just logged on after a few days off. I like this one very much. As Tina said - evokes times past - You're very prolific, having trouble keeping up with all your output. Everything you write is very readable. Steve

SteveM

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi there Steve, thankyou so much for reading and leaving a great comment. I really do appreciate you reading my pieces, it encourages me to keep writing, when I know people enjoy what I write. Thankyou again and I hope you are well. Enjoy the rest of your week. Jenny.

 

Submitted by L G Meadows on
The mideval feel comes to life in this. Love it.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hello L G Meadows, that was exactly what I was trying to capture, being a lover of all things Mediaeval, is what inspired me to write this piece. Thankyou so much for reading and letting me know your thoughts, it's much appreciated. Jenny.

 

Submitted by shoe on
Reminds me of that wonderful folk song, 'the queen and the soldier' I think it's called, lovely Arthurian feel to it,

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
What a great comment shoe, thankyou so much. I hope you are having a nice day. Again thankyou for reading and commenting. Jenny.

 

Submitted by seashore on
I could picture this - much enjoyed.

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Thankyou so much for reading seashore. I'm so glad you enjoyed it, and thankyou for letting me know, much appreciated. Jenny.

 

Submitted by RachelPatricia on
Really enjoyed this, Jenny - took me away to a more opulent time and place for a moment, thank you! ;o) Loved that image of the angel hanging in mid air, too, and thought the further descriptions of it were beautiful, thanks for another great read :) Rachel xx

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Rachel, it's wonderful to know that you enjoyed reading this piece and to know that you captured the scene. Thankyou so much for letting me know and for reading. Hope you're having a great week. Jenny. xx

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Nathen, that is so kind of you to leave such a great comment, it's really made my day. thankyou for reading and for letting me know your thoughts, it's very much appreciated. Jenny. x