Killing Time
By Silver Spun Sand
Wed, 22 Jun 2011
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After he left, they told me –
‘Keep occupied...start writing...
take up painting, again.’ Buy
myself a dog; go for long walks
in the park. Enjoy my newfound
freedom...Remember
no more shirts to iron...no meals
to prepare at set times...no more
scraping toothpaste off the sink –
or being sick of my own voice
when I’d ask him, nicely, of course,
not to oil his bike in the kitchen...
But what do I do, when the tap’s
dripping, or the drain’s blocked?
“Ring a plumber,” they quipped.
“Can’t afford,” it my reply...
“Buy a book, then...on DIY,”
they said, and so I did. Except,
nowhere, but nowhere, did it explain,
how to fill the space he used to fit in.
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Someone's got the blues for
Someone's got the blues for an old lover. Well done Tina- I enjoyed this
;)Pia
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When I clicked on this title
Permalink Submitted by maggyvaneijk on
When I clicked on this title I began with a smile at the prospect of reading a Tina poem and then the corners of my smile slowly began to slide downwards as the sadness of the piece sunk in. I especially like the chorus of motivators in this poem, "keep occupied" "ring a plumber".
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You always put us in the
You always put us in the place you describe Tina, that is a massive gift. Very much enjoyed. :-)
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Could almost hear the tears
Permalink Submitted by L G Meadows on
Could almost hear the tears in your voice. Enjoyed the read.
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I really enjoyed this one -
Permalink Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on
I really enjoyed this one - I agree with Nathan - very skilfully done
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Yes, very good the way you
Yes, very good the way you mix and balance the emotions.
Rob
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Tina - this is beautiful and
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Tina - this is beautiful and very poignant. I think many of us have been there, or experienced something similar, but you have put it in just the right words.
Overthetop1
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Okay, at least for the time
Okay, at least for the time being can we put aside the fact that this is a beautiful poem told in a totally original and painfully honest voice? There is an inherent problem here and I don't mind being the first to point it out: the ultra-liberal, bra-burning femi-nazis are going to take issue. That's what they did to Willa Cather after she wrote 'My Antonia'. They didn't like the ending, when the heroine married that farmer, got prenant a half dozen times and actually enjoyed indulging the grandchildren.
The National Organization of Women (at least in America) told their members not to read Willa Cather. No matter that she was far and away one of the greatest writers of the eary 1900s. Do you have a NOW chapter in England? If so, you might want to publish and apology or a retraction or move to a warm climate. I don't mean to tell you how to live your life but...
barryj1
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