The way we were
By seashore
Mon, 05 Dec 2011
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Whenever I think of you
and the way we were,
I find him there too
pushing you aside
forcing me to remember
all the other unfinished
business -
random memories,
initials engraved on a tree
in Oban
a rowing boat on Grasmere Lake
a smoke-filled car drive to
it-didn't-matter-where
Neil Diamond, Roberta Flack
and all the love songs
that remind me of you,
and him
You have become inseparable,
one dead, the other dying
no endings or goodbyes,
only beginnings
and squared circles
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A small thread of light, at
Permalink Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
A small thread of light, at the end of such a
poignant poem Coral. But well written and one
which I think you put a lot into.
Good read.
Jenny.
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Very powerful indeed, Coral.
Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Very powerful indeed, Coral. Well done on the cherry;-)
Tina
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I see your poetry vividly
I see your poetry vividly seashore - initials engraved on a tree in Oban - it always makes the journey you take us on so visual and enjoyable. :-)
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Hello seashore. A nice one,
Hello seashore.
A nice one, and agree with FB re the "...initials engraved on a tree..."
Oban of all places.
ScoZen
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Some really beautiful images
Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Some really beautiful images in this one, Coral. It's simple but breath-taking. Well done! :)
Magic xxx
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I think the power of this
I think the power of this piece is in the economy of words. What a gem.
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I love your skill with
I love your skill with words, I feel as though I've read much more than I have, because as I read, my mind is conjuring up all kinds kinds of emotions and
interpretations, it's a wonderful talent to have.
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Very much enjoyed, seashore
Very much enjoyed, seashore (Coral?). Grassmere - know it well. Your usual precision with words, none wasted and all pulling their weight. Well done!
sue
TVR
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Lovely I've read this a
Lovely I've read this a couple of times. I really enjoyed :-)
Beeme x
k.
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This is beautifuly written
Permalink Submitted by Overthetop1 on
This is beautifuly written and so evocative. Sad though. The last line works so well.
Overthetop1
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Hello again seashore, this
Hello again seashore, this is written with your usual wonderfulness so I came back for another read.
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Wonderfulness indeed, Coral
Permalink Submitted by RachelPatricia on
Wonderfulness indeed, Coral - the simplicity of structure works so well here and the imagery is like a slap to the senses. Just beautiful - very much enjoyed :)
Rachel xx
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Your poem is like a spinning
Permalink Submitted by Richard L. Prov... on
Your poem is like a spinning web of emotion. Nice job. PS. You write well. Richard L. Provencher
Richard L. Provencher
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