The Gas Moon

By hilary west

Wed, 01 Feb 2012

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Kahl, Moon, Human, Group, Silhouette

A gas moon,
Silver in the meter,
Turning its glow to earth.
Tidal sea does not liberate me,
The moon's meaning is lunacy.

It will light the way for lovers
Moonbeams spread on the walk
To the paradise garden.
But midnight plants which grow in its light
Will not cure gaseous thoughts.

The pollution sphere is not our God,
Trawling our minds, seeping into our consciousness.
Silver in the meter,
Turning its glow to earth
Lighting us up like a shroud.

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Some wonderful imagery here,

Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on Wed, 2012-02-01 19:26

Some wonderful imagery here, hilary, in this highly imaginitive poem. Love the analogy of the 'gas moon' with its meter;-) And as for the ending...quite ominous, and not what I had expected, and all the better for it, may I say;-) Much enjoyed. Tina

Glad you liked it SSS. I

Permalink Submitted by hilary west on Wed, 2012-02-01 19:38

Glad you liked it SSS. I thought I smelt a gas leak and then could see a half moon in the sky. Somehow I put the two together and came home and wrote this. So many legends attribute madness to the influence of the moon too!

That must explain it

Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on Wed, 2012-02-01 19:42

That must explain it then...with me, anyway. I'm always moon-gazing;-)

Yes, but it works magic too

Permalink Submitted by hilary west on Wed, 2012-02-01 19:51

Yes, but it works magic too apparently, and cures all sorts of ills! Definitely a double-edged entity:-

I like this very much

Permalink Submitted by scratch on Wed, 2012-02-01 21:16

I like this very much Hilary. It acts in a way that is a blanket or a skin even. I really want to get under the skin and thereby lies the quality. Thanks for sharing.

Thanks for commenting,

Permalink Submitted by hilary west on Thu, 2012-02-02 22:11

Thanks for commenting, scratch. Glad you could see something in it!

And I love this, hilary.

Permalink Submitted by TVR on Fri, 2012-02-24 17:26

And I love this, hilary. Also love the title and the ending: Silver in the meter, Turning its glow to earth Lighting us up like a shroud. I think the phrase, 'Silver in the meter' as well as being wonferfully descriptive, reminds me of my early days at home when the lights would go off and someone would shout: ANYONE GOT A SHILLING FOR THE METER? Yes, I am that old. Thought it was a really good poem... well done! By the way, hadn't realised you are already a published author. Well done again! Best wishes. sue

TVR

Thanks very much for your

Permalink Submitted by hilary west on Fri, 2012-02-24 22:24

Thanks very much for your encouraging words, Sue. Yes, I have a few books out. I have my own 'page' on amazon. Best Wishes, Hilary!

Thanks for that. hilary,

Permalink Submitted by TVR on Sun, 2012-02-26 21:55

Thanks for that. hilary, I'll check you out on Amazon. Congratulations on your successes. Best Wishes. sue

TVR

I too liked this poem

Permalink Submitted by skinner_jennifer on Sat, 2012-02-25 13:58

I too liked this poem hilary, it's amazing how ideas can come in the strangest ways, as with your connection between the gas meter and the moon. It proves you have an imagination that will help you to write even more brilliant books. Good luck in the future. Jenny.

The Gas Moon

By hilary west

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Some wonderful imagery here,

Glad you liked it SSS. I

That must explain it

Yes, but it works magic too

I like this very much

Thanks for commenting,

And I love this, hilary.

Thanks very much for your

Thanks for that. hilary,

I too liked this poem

Thanks for your kind wishes,

Thanks Sue. But I reckon the

I suppose this isn't a happy

No, Luly, a poem of

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