Epilogue

Gold cherry

By maggyvaneijk

Fri, 03 Feb 2012
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14 comments
 

I want to crawl inside you
like a suitcase and live there
forever, the safest place.

You saved me last summer when Chinese
a/c’s drip drop dripped onto my anxious
head. You took me home so I wouldn’t
be freaked by all the people
in Times Square.

When I was younger and makeshift
blades swung across my skin
like scythes, I lied so many times

you bandaged me
and showed me
what life was really like.

My heart had been
washed out and wrung out again
and again, a wrinkled sack
rather than a blood red organ.

When I hear “I love you”
I can only shrug

“How much?”

I wish I were able to shape
my thoughts into something
I can say out loud
or breathe into the air:

a cold winter sky
filling up with:
I’m-sorries.

Certificate 15
Love

Comments

Submitted by hudsonmoon on
Well that was quick. I was noticing you hadn't posted anything in a while and now there you are. Such a great opening line. I don't always know why I like a particular poem of yours other than to say they feel real and I come away feeling I've really bitten into something good. Rich PS. I was born and raised in NYC and am still freaked out by the people in Times Square.

 

Submitted by Florian on
I don't quite know why either, probably the sincerity but I like this very much too.

Submitted by maggyvaneijk on
Thanks to you both!

 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new maggvaneijk Hello! Another great little gem! Like all of it. So many words of expression to real life! But truly well written. Last few lines; A cold winter sky filling up with: I'm-sorries. Good to hear from you,keep writing. And warm. Are your's from life's experiences. julie x

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
"I want to crawl inside you like a suitcase" - has to be one of the best opening lines of poetry I've ever read! Really like this one, Maggy - brilliant title too! Magic xxx

 

Submitted by shoe on
I read this and came back to read again, something about it leaves me wanting more (in good way) The last two verses hooked me especially.

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on
please add me to the list of people swept away by the first stanza! Fantastic poem one little thing: When I was younger and make shift blades swung across my skin ignore if you did it deliberately, but usually makeshift is all one word

 

Submitted by maggyvaneijk on
not deliberate, thanks for pointing that out!

 

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Submitted by oldpesky on
This, and you posting only one poem a month, is what's leaving me and many others wanting more. Like everyone else I loved that opening line.

Submitted by maggyvaneijk on
Thanks Pesky!

 

Submitted by Sooz006 on
Hall of fame top ten opening lines for me to, When I was younger and makeshift blades swung across my skin like scythes, I lied so many times Not autobiographical but written as though they are, one hell of a writer.

 

Submitted by thanksforthepar... on
This is so beautiful; you've somehow managed to capture a feeling I can identify with so strongly that it becomes my emotion, although it's not about me, and that's a real skill. Your poems have a really strong structure and flow. It's been nice to discover/meet you :)

 

Submitted by maggyvaneijk on
Thanks! Likewise :)