Two Kids And A Mortgage To Feed
By bonzo
Fri, 13 Jul 2012
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each day unfolds just like the last,
wake up, eat toast, make tea;
becalmed between future and the past.
with happy thoughts or mood downcast,
catch bus, swipe in, make tea;
each day unfolds just like the last.
the clocks move slow, the emails fast,
click on, click off, make tea;
stagnate between future and the past.
the odd new face, a change in cast,
sit here, print there, make tea;
each day unfolds just like the last.
a week off booked, a sickie grasped,
sleep in, eat toast, make tea;
adrift between future and the past.
but it's a job; the dole queue's vast,
don't cry, don't howl, make tea;
each day unfolds just like the last,
becalmed between future and the past.
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The repetition makes this
Permalink Submitted by Jessiibear on
The repetition makes this poem, for me. Great job and welcome to ABCtales. :)
Jess
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I also like the repetition
Permalink Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on
I also like the repetition in this.
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Cleverly written. It may be
Cleverly written.
It may be me, but I kept wanting to put in a 'the' in the line 'becalmed between future and the past.' ie 'becalmed between the future and the past.' and the similar ones, but maybe you prefer the change of rhythm there.
regards, Rhiannon
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As insert says, bonzo, the
Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
As insert says, bonzo, the repetition suits it so well. Many of us, I feel, will be able to identify with this poem. Enjoyed.
Tina;-)
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You're welcome, and I for
Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
You're welcome, and I for one, certainly, look forward to reading more of your work. Have a good Saturday;-)
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Hi Bonzo. Definitely a
Hi Bonzo. Definitely a keeper. Truth contained in this and expressed lyrically. Well done.
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Hello .. l'm afraid l have a
Hello .. l'm afraid l have a poem with your name in it !! How funny is that ?? I liked your work, bonzo xx
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