Sleeping, Sleeping City

Cherry

By thanksfortheparakeets@gmail.com

Sun, 12 Aug 2012
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Sleeping, sleeping City

Dream

pink seashore shells

and gentle garden bells

Hush little baby, hush

Far are witches and wolves from the door

Soft sigh mothers turn in quiet beds

children supped their curds and whey

warm quilts wrap smooth shoulders

All gingerbread scented and milky way safe.

Fairies and godmothers turned keys in their locks

pulled drapes at windows to keep out

Those ugly catty scratchy Sisters,

Wicked twisted spitting Stepmother,

The Woodsman spying, fawning and lying

and oh!

That frightful raging jealous Queen...

Ssshhh the City is sleeping

beauty and calm

rooftops glow under snow white Moon

sweet twinkle, twinkle up in the sky

Far, far is the cry of the Chopper who comes to...

Hush little baby

Please don't cry

Mama's gonna buy you a lullaby

Certificate U
Poem
London
Fantasy

Comments

Submitted by Sooz006 on
I really like this. The burglar, the rapist the car jacker, all the people up to no good lurk the city at night along with the nursery rhyme monsters, all out to steal a child's innocent sleep in one way or another. Lovely poem. I'd only make one change ... in this world of commercialism where everything has a price on the last line I'd have her buying the child a lullabye, not a diamond ring.

 

Submitted by shoe on
Beautiful, 'All gingerbread scented and milky way safe.' we'd like it to be like that always wouldn't we!

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Wonderful writing, marion;-) Tina

 

Submitted by thanksforthepar... on
Hi Sooz, thanks for your feedback, I see what you mean with the commercialism, a lullaby would be a refreshing change but the line is a reference to that song mama's gonna buy you a mocking bird...and so on...I think I meant the last line to be a question...a lot of commentators cited poverty and frustration as the underlying causes of the riots so I guess I wanted to comment on that too, but in a questioning sort of way....but then again, lullaby has a lovely ring to it (no pun intended!) and still raises the same question...thanks! :)

 

Submitted by thanksforthepar... on
Thanks Shoe, it'd be lovely wouldn't it...I wonder what sort poetry such safety, peace and contentment would produce? Interesting thought :)

 

Submitted by thanksforthepar... on
Thanks Tina :)

 

Submitted by TVR on
Hi Marion, loved this poem too. I think Sooz made a really good suggestion above – lullaby in place of diamond ring. Really enjoyed, you expressed your sentiments so well. Many congrats on cherries. Trev

TVR

Submitted by thanksforthepar... on
Thanks for welcome feedback, edit has been made! :)

 

Submitted by moonphish on
reads like a beautiful fairy tale prayer...loved it

Submitted by thanksforthepar... on
Thanks moonphish, that's a lovely comment.

 

Submitted by Richard L. Prov... on
Marion, I really enjoyed this poem. All the best. Richard.
Richard L. Provencher

Submitted by thanksforthepar... on
Hi Richard, Thanks for your comment and thanks for stopping by :)