Curtains.
By ScoZen
Fri, 28 Sep 2012
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30 comments
silk opens
to a hymn
for a corpse
on the slow
slide to fire
velvet tight
against the grill
stale breath and incense
sins confessed
fleeting remorse
nets twitch
the neighbour
noting indiscretion
across
the way
velour voyeur
wet with
anticipation
spies and
sighs
cotton close
on the
wave
goodbye
tears hold
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I really enjoyed this ScoZen
Permalink Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on
I really enjoyed this ScoZen
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moonphish -i love this....so
moonphish -i love this....so beautifully macabre
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Yes I like this too Scozen-
Yes I like this too Scozen- sinister and a bit sad- sorry even..
pas på digselv..
;)Pia
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This is awesome, Scozen. The
This is awesome, Scozen. The first and last stanzas are perfect book-ends, the order is perfect, the words are perfect. My favourite poem in quite a while
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Beautiful, ScoZen. You pack
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Beautiful, ScoZen. You pack a wealth of images into so few words and the poem drips vividly from the page. Well done on the cherries!
Magic xxx
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Pure magic, ScoZen;-) Sand
Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Pure magic, ScoZen;-)
Sand Lady
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Hi again, ScoZen,
Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Hi again, ScoZen, unfortunately I'm still at least a couple of years away from my dream house on South Street, but I can still hope ;-)
Magic xxx
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Scozen, dead flattered that
Scozen, dead flattered that you been recommending peel and chop, thank you. I read it again myself a bit ago- thought it could do with a rewrite. I read this out to my fella; he is not a poetry fan but was very impressed
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It's spot on ScoZen, some
It's spot on ScoZen, some splendid words and images that you have given to us here.
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velour voyeur wet
velour voyeur
wet with
anticipation
spies and
sighs..great stuff.
Brilliant poem, Northerner or not.
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No, not yet, although I
No, not yet, although I have considered reading the riot act to her!!
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This is an exceptional
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This is an exceptional example of a sparse, economical use of language working to its full effect. Really liked this one, ScoZen. MS already noted my favourite stanza.
All the best.
Steve
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Fantastic! This is really
Permalink Submitted by sanexpeditus on
Fantastic! This is really superb poetry, a classic example of 'word economy' that paints a thousand pictures with so few. From cremation, to confession, to the twitching of curiosity and the anticipation of pleasure, to the tissued farewell to a loved one... very clever writing, so many portraits within such a slender stem of description. Bravo!
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