Grrr
By Highhat
Wed, 06 Feb 2013
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It’s the grotty feeling I get
when you can’t grasp
that I’m growing old,
too old for these gruelling
games of ‘we don’t agree’,
because I sense your grim disdain
and I hate your glowering grievance,
it grates against my granite pride
and makes me feel ungrateful.
Waiting for your gratuitous grin
which tries my groggy patience
and creates such a great graze,
streaking grime on any mutual growth
in understanding the gratitude
most would grab, even on a grey day.
So stop this grave loathing
and greet me not with gripe but with your grit.
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Comments
I think you felt better
I think you felt better getting that off your chest! Alleviation by alliteration?
Rhiannon
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I thought the last 4/5 lines
I thought the last 4/5 lines could have been tightened a little - got a sense the alliteration was getting in the way of the message a little - but I still like this. Good effort Highhat.
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I can imagine a lot of
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I can imagine a lot of people can relate to this one, Highhat.
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It's a bit of a head rhyme,
It's a bit of a head rhyme, but it comes from the heart. Frustration and all it's ilk. It has a certain grim grit.
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Nicely done Pia. Lots to
Nicely done Pia. Lots to think about here regarding the straining of love. One (tiny) typo; 'distain' - disdain.
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