Extra Busy Parents

By Rhiannonw

Thu, 23 May 2013
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Dashing here and dashing there,
and at pains the work to share –
– paid employment, nappies, chores
( –“these are mine, and those are yours”);
shuttling children everywhere,
quick to feel it isn’t fair
if he wants his favourite leisure,
and you like some different pleasure;
– rarely sitting down together,
past reviewing, plans preparing,
hurt confessing, wisdom pooling
bond of partnership cementing:
friendship, caring love maturing.

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Comments

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Phew! Rhiannon, I felt worn out just reading this busy poem. You summed up a busy young family life so well. I like the way it flows from line to line. It had a good rhythm to it. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on
Thank you, Jenny. It's so easy to take each other for granted when so busy, and also feeling peer pressures to rush children around to so much, neither they nor the parents getting time to 'catch up' on thinking and sharing! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by VeraClark on
How true is this!! Love the frantic busy bee rhythm.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on
Thank you, Vera! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
I too got swept along with this one, Rhiannon. A clever use of rhythm indeed, and I could certainly identify with it, as will, doubtless, many others. Very much enjoyed. Tina

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on
Thank you, Tina, glad you felt it 'worked'. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Denzella on
Hello Rhiannonw, It certainly worked. Like Jenny I felt quite exhausted and it brought back memories of a time when life was that hectic. Lovely read, Rhiannonw, MOya
 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on
Thanks, Moya, glad you thought to. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Rhiannon

Yes, the poem itself is so busy that it well portrays the story.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Tha'nks again, Jean. So easy to get in a 'too busy' whirl, and feels guilty if not in such a rush! Rhiannon