Azalean Amorata

By amlee

Mon, 27 May 2013
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Ambushed by shocking pink
we are engulfed
in a sudden embrace
of unexpected glory

We cling
rootless trees in windless air
to stay the sway
of shifting earth beneath
as the intoxication of pines
flood, invade our blood
Till hearts pound in sylvan silence
arresting breath and birdsong
and sunbeams halt their quest
for unsuspecting bowers

We succumb
lost in heady oblivion
gulping eternity upon our lips
as twinkling azalean starbursts
smile their benediction

Certificate U
Poem
Andrée's poems
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Comments

Submitted by The Walrus on
Love it, Amlee, but in my humble opinion it's a little too wordy, and it would be better if you simplified the language a little. Others, though, will probably disagree.

Submitted by amlee on
Thanks Walrus for constructive criticism. Did a tweak n a tidy. What do you think? Andrée : )

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