Still Waters
By london_calling79
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Locked down, screwed up tight, you’re not getting in.
Not even a chink of light will creep over the rim.
The nuts are rusted shut so there will not be any more.
Hope that anyone will try to open up that door.
Don’t think you’re any different now due to the lies you bled.
There’s nothing left, there’s nothing else, there’s no more to be said.
Pinned down, no release, nothing’s getting out.
Not even a breath of air has hope of taking flight.
Wooden cages hide so much from people who aren’t free.
Still waters run deep they say no deeper than in me.
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I like this, lc...and the
I like this, lc...and the tight structure is very effective.
Tina
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I like it too lc. I really
I like it too lc. I really like the "bleeding lies" image. "Childish? No, not in my opinion at least.
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There is nothing left that
There is nothing left that hasn't already been said, I really enjoyed it:)
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I personally enjoyed the
I personally enjoyed the adjectives that you usually don't get from poems, and the rhyme scheme, I felt, tied it together perfectly. I'm not sure why you don't like it, though.
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I really liked this. Flows so
I really liked this. Flows so well and fits neatly together.
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