The other World (Night came early I.P)

By adora

Mon, 14 Oct 2013
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This world is sturdy and firm

From years of abuse

The border walls are made with good intentions

Their sincerity long forgot

The earth that covers it gets softer every day

Breaking away like uneven parts that never quite fit together again

I used to visit here on particular days

I would dig you see, to keep warm

Shovel out the self loathing, the misery, the need to be wanted, the want to be needed

Carve out the mistakes, sacrifices searching for light in the darkness

The rain salty and tepid flowing right through me

I never quite got used to the cold, and

Night  would always come early in the other world.

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Comments

Submitted by hudsonmoon on

Good one for the IP, adora. I was taken with these lines: 

The border walls are made with good intentions

Their sincerity long forgot

Rich

 

Submitted by adora on

Thank you so much for reading and commenting Rich. Much appreciated.

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Submitted by Ray Schaufeld on

Deep stuff. The isolation of attempted self-protectiveness. I can relate to the earth walls and the dark and 'the rain salty and tepid flowing right through me'     Elsie

Submitted by adora on

Thank you Elsie. I am still surprised when someone manages to get exactly what I mean. Thanks a bunch for reading and commenting!

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Submitted by Art of the Diver on

Nice to meet you Andora and to read works like this supports that opportunity... beautifully written and I'm sure so many of us can relate to your words... thank you for sharing your talents.. take care... Rob

Submitted by adora on

Thank you Rob. Glad to be here and glad to share.

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