Focus on the Unknown

Cherry

By skinner_jennifer

Thu, 17 Oct 2013
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20 comments
 

Wild primroses

blossom...dancing

in pale moonlight;

angel of the garden

the grass your stage,

 

you would flutter

like the butterfly,

I too danced around

that day...in lost worlds

and unknown places,

 

jungles of visible memories

catapulting me between trees,

like shards of broken glass;

the tingle of skin splits

in all directions...I see all.

 

Travelling to lost worlds,

if courage is all that is needed...

don't forsake this venturesome spirit,

life's valuable execution propelling me;

to leave all that I've ever know behind.

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Comments

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

i love this one Jenny

 

Submitted by a102866 on

I like the ephemeral, transient theme of your poem. I, also, like the natural wheel on which you have spun your far-fledged dreams. In stanza one, I do not think that wild primroses are found or bound in spaded garden rows. Maybe, for the next to last line, "Angel or Guardian of the fields"(either word). I love the metaphorical profusion in stanza three. The last stanza is a little disapointing. It is a plain, unimaginative summation of your feelings. I think that the emotive connection, so beautifully linked in the previous stanzas, is lost in the last stanza. If you could re-write the last stanza, and be a little more artistic, creative, then you would have an amazing poem.

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Jenny - this is perfection itself;-)

Tina

 

Submitted by Bee on

Hi Jenny. 

I've read this quite a few times just because I wanted to, and will do again. It's lovely.

Bee

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi insert,  really pleased you enjoyed reading and thank you so much for letting me know,  always appreciated.  Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Wow! thank you so much to the editor that cherry picked this one...it's always a wonderful feeling when I get those juicy cherries.  Made my day.   smiley

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi there a102866,  I enjoyed reading your input into my poem and thank you for your thoughts.  I understand what you mean,  will make note about what you say.  Appreciate you taking the time out to read and letting me know.  Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Good morning Tina,  I've been feeling very spiritual of late and I think it's coming out in poetry.  I'm so pleased you liked this one and as you know I greatly appreciate you letting me know.  Thank you so much and big smiles from me.   smiley   Hope you're having a good day and enjoy your weekend.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Good morning Bee,  to know that you enjoyed this poem enough to come back and read it again,  has more than made my day.  When I set out to write it,  I'd just come out of meditation and the words just seemed to flow.  Strange how sometimes words can just appear before your eyes and when you read them back,  you just have to say..."Did I just write that?"  I expect you know what I mean.  I do so appreciate your time and comment.  Thank you so much.  smiley Have a great weekend.

 

Submitted by Art of the Diver on

Lovely Jenny... and all dressed up in a cherry bow... perfect for all time... and reasons to love its flow... Congrats.. Rob

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi there Rob,  many thanks for reading this poem.  I can't tell you how much of a compliment it is to know you enjoyed it.  When I read your work,  I think of the many famous poets of old that have graced such wonderful works of art.  Be sure your writing is up there with the best.  Appreciate your time.  Jenny.

 

Submitted by Art of the Diver on

Wow thank you for that... You are far too gracious Jenny... and FYI I have enjoyed all of your work that I have read so far... this piece is a beauty... take care up there.  Rob

Submitted by Linda Wigzell Cress on

Ethereal and lovely.  No more to say.  Like Bee, one to read over again.

Linda

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi there Linda,  I'm so glad you enjoyed reading this poem and loved your mention of 'Etheral'. Appreciate you reading.  I hope you're feeling better now.  Have a good day.  Jenny.

 

Submitted by Linda Wigzell Cress on

All fine now thanks Jenny.  Ups and downs with special Grandson, and just had flu jab.  Onwards and upwards! 

Linda

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

I'm so pleased that you're better after your fall Linda.  Your Grandson's so lucky to have you. Take care.  Jenny.

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Jenny, this is a beauty and well deserving of the cherries. Well done.

Luigi x

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Thank you so much for reading this poem Luigi and for your kind words.  I'm glad you liked it.  Jenny. x

 

Submitted by The royster on

Hi Jenny,   You could almost mix this with my Dingle Dell.  Most enjoyable. Well deserved Cherries.  Roy

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Thank you for reading Roy...and for your comment and congrats.  Always good to hear from you.  Jenny.