Did anyone ask for your opinion ..
By denni1
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She hadn't been out on a date for some years
Her daughter was young and she liked her mum there
I persuaded my friend that he was a good catch
We had a big talk and she gave it a bash
The first time he saw her, his heart leapt around
Not quite believing this woman he'd found
Was single, not swept up, still left on the shelf
Walking on air, happy, pinching himself
Her sister said, 'whoa there, he's got these three kids
One of the children doesn't know who he is
At sixteen, he left his wee lad and ran off'
But my friend knew different, the gossips were wrong
Admitting to her about his errant ways
Was a revelation, as back in those days
The ex had a family who had shooed him off
Believing their daughter should marry a toff
As they became close, my dear friend helped him see
Contacting his boy was a possibility
And he brought his kindness, love she'd not been shown
Dragged up in a cold place, her heart was like stone
I'd known all along that they were good to go
He had abundance of warmth that he'd flow
Into her soul, and she returned to him
Her beauty he'd soak up, this was a win-win
As l tell this tale, finger-waggers all round
Her family's disapproving of happiness found
They've lost the control of their daughter, but now
She feels so alive, it's that look from his brow
That's how their love-tank is kept filled right up
She has serenity, gentleness, touch
Because of her input, he'll contact son's mum
Talking things through is not something he's done
He's a rough diamond, but with a huge heart
She's a real stunner, both inside and out
They were so lost, lonely, but now, oh boy
Two people walk hand in hand, full of joy
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I know nobody asked for my
I know nobody asked for my opinion, but it seems I'm going to give it anyway. I liked this for its great ring of truth and for the way it flows in waves, almost being sucked out to the last at the end of each verse to open the next with a new surge. Hope that made sense. Well anyway, denni, I did very much enjoy your poem and the story. Good title, too.
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A real story where things
A real story where things work out well - I like it!. 'Talking things through is not something he's done' stands out as a good line. I can relate to it though my own experience Elsie
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