Universal HoneyTraps (IP)

By Rhiannonw

Tue, 14 Jan 2014
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8 comments
 

Sugar Coatings
[pic: pitcher plant at Kew]

Skill that’s subtle, clever, deft
puts attractive gloss on theft,
drugs, unfaithfulness, and lies
– to stir desire, and please the eyes …

Place a toe in entrance wide,
slipping in a plunging slide –
Where’s the promised thrill, excitement?
Turning bitter in a moment.
Can I struggle back on top?
– flounder, struggle, fall and flop.

Cannot clamber out unless
assistance strong lifts from distress
– more powerful than the one so caught:
help’s at hand, but seldom sought.

“Food gained by fraud tastes sweet to a man, but he ends up with a mouth full of gravel.” Proverbs 20:17

[This week's IP: The Honeytrap]

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Christian, Biblical
Spiritual
Inspiration Point (work that responds to our weekly writing cue)

Comments

Submitted by Ray Schaufeld on

Great poem, shows the initial sensuality of addiction and the criminal life and the viciousness of the entrapment. I like the image of the Venus Flytrap plant too      Elsie

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Hi, Elsie, nice to hear from you. Yes, I had in mind many 'traps', deceitful seductions, but addictions come to mind vividly. Actually, though it was 'Venus Fly Trap' that came to my mind, I realised afterwards that the picture I was thinking of was the insectiverous Pitcher plants, as the Venus Fly Trap actually is the one that has 2 sort of leaves that snap shut on the insect!
regards, Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Bee on

Very good, Rhiannon. The last line says it all, really. Once you've allowed yourself to be caught, it's near impossible to find the will to get free.

Bee

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you. Yes, that is so, Bee, isnt it? yet, the help is there to call for (prayer, and sometimes from people), maybe just a little 'yelp' can be tried. But, of course, taking warning and not succumbing is ever better, though i think we need help to discern and not give in to temptation too! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by scratch on

Very good.  Rhyming for the most part is consistent too.  Well done Rhiannonw.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Scratch, I appreciate that. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

A brilliantly written piece, Rhiannon,so very carefully crafted, as is one of your hallmarks. The last stanza giving it a nice, strong finish.  Very much enjoyed.

Tina

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Tina. I'm glad you felt it worked, and thank you for writing such a nice comment. Rhiannon