Interlude

By Rhiannonw

Fri, 17 Jan 2014
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12 comments
 

A dome of heavy cloud,
oppressive shroud …
here and there a thinning glow –
and seachlights fan out, show
a dappling on the valley floor …
torn rags of eggshell blue appear,
the air seems brighter, lighter, clear,
the ceiling lifting, distancing, until
half the sky is blue with wisps of cotton wool …
drizzle returns, the blue retreats –
squeezed out by oozing, drifitng darker cloud
we hurry home beneath a dank and soggy shroud.

 

Certificate U
Poem
Countryside explorations
Nature

Comments

Submitted by scratch on

Wow Rhiannonw, you made me want to find an umbrella!  Good one.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Scratch, glad you enjoyed, even if left feeling wet!
Actually, we were on a rare few hours away together from care responsibilities, and that interlude meant a lovely drive to a farmshop and lunch, and on for a while, before it ended again!
regards, Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Bee on

This is lovely, Rhiannon. Beautiful description and the words just flow so well. I could almost feel the movement of the clouds as they thinned and returned. Hope you enjoyed your interlude, too. 

Bee

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Yes, we did, thank you, Bee. And I'm glad you could feel the lovely lightening and changing of the conditions, such interludes are much appreciated, as you indicated in your poem too. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by VeraClark on

This is so visual and picturesque, Rhiannon. Eggshell blue, the ceiling, cotton wool - they all merge to make it so sharp.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Vera, I'm glad I managed to capture that for you, and for myself, the interesting and pleasureable changing scene. regards, Rhiannon

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

This is a great poem Rhiannon and I loved all the vivid descriptions.

Beautifully done.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Jenny, and thank you for telling me. regards, Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

This is really atmospheric, Rhiannon, and I love your imagery of the 'searchlights'.  Sunbursts really do look like that.  A great word to use.  

Very much enjoyed.

Tina

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, so much, Tina. It was lovely to be able to 'catch it' in verse!
Rhiannon

 

Submitted by jeand on

HI Rhiannon

Isn't it true that when the days are heavy and shroudlike - that little tiny burst of sunlight and speck of blue sky makes all the difference. Like a ray of hope.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

yes, Jean, thanks. That is what I wanted to capture and remind myself and others. Rhiannon